Michael A Chase wrote:

% Used most of the grammar corrections.

In a flash the cutlass was pulled free of Kraken's belt and swung, 
neatly decapitating the {man's head from his shoulders : man}. 

%Yeah, I guess decapitation by definition lops off the head.

as the man drew the weapon when he got to the word 'spoke' and
continued talking as though nothing had happened. Had Daredevil not
been able to sense the sudden jump in the commander's heartbeat, even
he probably would have been taken by surprise.

No noise from the holster either?

% Um, it was well oiled?

"Gar, not the old fire extinguisher to the face trick!" The pirate
tried looking through the white mist surrounding him, but could see
nothing.

Third time this week?

% Kraken: Better than the cream pie to the face trick. I hate 
practitioners of Moe-Fu.

"Correct." Barracuda's hand started to lift the patch when an arrow
hit it, the tip exploding and dousing half of his face {in it : with
glue : with whipped cream}.

% With a stick substance should suffice.

"Which he did," Captain Japan added. "You've really got to learn
about this whole group of heroes thing. You {cab : can} get a lot
more accomplished working as a team, like those two losers did when
they two-on-one'd you."

Unless he hab a colb. :}b

% Heh.

matter the cost. So he spent nearly all of his time trying to dig up
leads with an obsessive vigor. His grades were suffering, and he had
been skipping Avengers' summons for the last week as well. Finding
Shampoo was what mattered.

I wonder if he's mentioned Elektra to Stick.

% Nah, this is his personal crusade, and he assumed the Elektra thing 
was a dead end.

Matsuo answered, "It's Elektra, Sir. She's killing the men we keep 
sending to kill her."

Glad that reports of her demise were greatly exaggerated.

% No body, no death. Actually I think the original Glen Talbot's body 
was never recovered (vaporized by a volcano) and he's miraculously 
stayed dead.

Youji scoffed. "Nah, I tried it. They start whining and bitching
about size, tempo, and want to be held afterwards, like it's all
about them. When I sleep with a girl, it's all about me and my
pleasure, not them. Doing it when they're dead makes it easier for
both of us.

Probably safer too, considering his taste in girls.

% Yes, Youji was quite the slut.

% And I confess, Weizz Krouze was so awful I enjoyed whacking them in 
this. I really should have made myself stop watching it after the fourth 
ep.

As he wrapped it up, a voice cracking with the weight of age said, 
"Haven't you idiots learned to not go into battle without a plan?
You're lucky I happened along or it would have been the end for both
of you."

I thought that was her when you mentioned the cue.

% No one else uses one, except Eight Ball, one of the more lame 
Sleepwalker villains he faced.

"I should just leave you {know : now} to a lifetime of wallowing in
your self-inflicted wounds," Elektra snarled. "But since Shampoo
meant something to me, and you meant something to her, I will share
with you an item she gave to me: the truth."

I guess she spent some time practicing to say that.

% Or just likes sounding pompous. :)

% Thanks for the comments.

DB Sommer


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