Quoting Loki-L <loki.laufeyjarson.ffml@gmail.com>:

"Those are training aids!" Akane defended her bindings

blushing

heavily.

Akane blushed heavily as she defended her bindings

It sounds better this way, but I am using defended in place of said
here.

So...don't.  

Won't somebody complain that you can't blush speech?

Only if you write it like this:

"Those are training aids," Akane blushed.

With the exclamation point they are separate but related sentences;
and believe me, having her defend the way her bindings are blushing is
so much worse.  

"I am not passing judgement on you, Child. It is really nothing

to

child

Really? But it would have been cpitalized if she had called her
daughter,
wouldn't it.

Words like "Daughter" and "Mom" are used as names.  But "child"
isn't a name or even a nickname.  It's just a description of Akane's
relative age to the character of Mrs. Brave.  It's the same thing
if Kuno calls Ranma "dog" or Ranma calls Akane "tomboy".  

"I regret having to keep you waiting, my bride to be," The

prince

excused
himself, "but the stupid little maid had an accident in the

kitchen

but that stupid

Changed it and also changed "bride to be" to "bride-to-be" for
consistency

I missed that one.  

to
uncover vital parts of her anatomy with every step she made and

her

top
only barely reached to the bottom of her breasts.

That would mean her breasts are totally exposed.

barely covered the bottom of her breasts

It depends on how you used to think about it. Your way might make
somebody think of a corset that only reaches up to the bottom of
her breasts. 

That's because I got confused about what was going on.  


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