Eric Holdt wrote:

Note:  This story takes place at the end of Ranma 1/2 and around book
seven of Love Hina, before Keitaro, Naru and Mutsumi tried their Tokyo
U exams for the second time.  Those dates don't match up at all, but
that's how I want it.  Also, I haven't read much of the Tenchi manga, so
I'll be using a lot of anime references for them. (Besides, none of the
manga has Kiyone in them.  Why is that?)

Kiyone from the GP is part of Tenchi TV (called
Tenchi Universe in the US) and Tenchi in Tokyo,
not part of Tenchi Muyo OVAs. In the OVAs, Kiyone
is the name of Tenchi's mother.

Note #2:  I've decided to experiment with a script format on this, rather
than a prose format.  No real reason, just for kicks and giggles.  But I'm 
not above rewriting it in prose form if I get enough complaints.

I think it would be better in prose. So that's
one vote for prose!

(Tonight, the Tendo Dojo is on fire.)

(No one knows exactly how the fire got started, as everyone was already
in bed when Kasumi woke up to the smell of smoke.  A quick
investigation told her that the entire first floor of the dojo was already
burning.  After waking everyone and escaping through the second floor
windows with Ranma and Genma's help, the fire department is called.)

Soun sleeps in the master bedroom downstairs.
Probably smoking in bed. :)

(Soun is absolutely beside himself, as he watches on helplessly as the
house that his ancestors had built several decades ago is reduced to
ashes right before his eyes.)

Well, part of the house maybe. The upstairs is
obviously a modern addition. Except for the guest
room Ranma and Genma sleep in, the three girl's
rooms are modern western-style rooms. Contrast:
the guest room has a sliding paper door, tatami
mats on the floor, and Ranma and Genma sleep on
futons. The girls' rooms have wooden swinging
doors, western-style beds, desks, and chairs.
Soun probably had it built when he started his
family.

(No one says anything, with the exception of the sobs from the Tendo's.
Nabiki pulls herself together first and pulls out her cell phone and calls
the family insurance agency.

It's on the speed dial. :)

Soun has fallen to his knees and is staring
at the ground, to full of anguish even to cry like everyone is expecting.)

(Ranma just stands in silence as he continues to hold Akane close to him.
As far as he is concerned, his future had just burned up with the dojo,
the dojo he was suppose to inherit and run.)

He wouldn't feel that way. Those were just buildings.
It's the land and the running of the schools he was to
inherit. Ranma in particular would probably think it
no big deal, having spent most of his time moving
from one place to another. Not to mention the
Saotome home was destroyed and needed rebuilding
shortly before this. He'd be used to this. The girls
would be in grief... it was their home where they'd
always lived.

(One of the neighbor's offers to bring the Tendo's and Saotome's in for
the night, which they graciously accept.)

(Everyone finally gets situated and tries to get a little more sleep,
knowing in reality that sleep isn't going to come.)

Akane:  What are we going to do now, Ranma?

Ranma: (shrugging) It's no big deal. You and the other
girls destroyed Mom's house and everything turned out
fine.

Akane: RANMA NO BAKA!! (mallets him)

(And a few blocks away, running through the darkness, a figure grins
triumphantly.)

Obviously the author, setting the fire to get a contrived
plot point which moves the story along. :)

Ranma-chan:  So why do I absolutely _have_ to be in my cursed form?

Nabiki:  Because the place we're going to be staying at is supposed to
be an all girls dorm.  They said they'd let daddy stay there because of
the trauma he's just been through, but you and your dad will have to
stay in your cursed forms while we're there unless you'd prefer to camp
out every night until the dojo gets rebuilt.

Ranma: Fine with me! I spent ten YEARS camping out.

Genma: (hits Ranma with a sign reading) [Shut up, Boy!]
(flips it around) [I like living indoors!]

Kasumi:  Perhaps I shouldn't ask this, Nabiki, but how did you manage
to get them to completely rebuild the house for so little money?

Nabiki:   You're right sis, you shouldn't ask.

Nabiki: I know who employs cheap Korean laborers.

Kasumi: I'm shocked! Taking advantage of national
prejudices just to get a lower price on construction
work!

Nabiki: I could always make Ranma do all the work.

Ranma: (shrugs) You have me fixin' the place every
time someone busts out a wall or Akane boots me
through the roof anyway.

Akane: RANMA NO BAKA!! (mallets him)

Nabiki: Looks like you're wearing that one out, Sis.

Akane: All the others got burnt up in the fire!

Ranma-chan:  So you're tellin' me I have to pretend to be a girl for what
could be an entire month?

(Genma-panda hits him over the head with a sign.)

Genma-panda:  [Quit complaining!  At least this way we'll have a place
to stay.]

Ranma-chan:  (Sighs) I guess, and at least I'll have some time away
from Ryoga and Shampoo and the rest of them.

Shampoo ducks back behind a tree.

Shampoo: Whew! Airen almost spot Shampoo.

(Scene:  The Tendo's and Saotome's are standing {except for Soun,
who is being carried by Genma-panda} outside of a large building,
staring at it in mixed wonder)

Ranma-chan:  (Awe) This place is huge!

Ranma-chan: (Ahhhh) This place ain't so big!

Narator: (hit's Ranma upside the head) This is
MY story! Follow the script!

Kasumi:  Are you sure we can stay here for free, Nabiki?

Nabiki:  Yep.  Like I said, it's a dorm.  Just have to pay a weekly rent,

For a limited time only, stay here ABSOLUTELY FREE... for
a weekly rent of 10,000 yen. :)

and with luck, we shouldn't be here for more than three or four weeks.
Apparently it used to be a hotel for anyone, but the old woman who
owned it decided to take a long vacation and turned it into a dorm for
girls instead.  All the better for us, really.

Ranma-chan:  Speak for yourself.

(Akane is about to start yelling at her when everyone hears a loud crash
from inside the building.  A few seconds later a young man comes
running out the front door, closely followed by several angry looking
women.)

Akane: Just as well, I've just about worn this hammer
out just on the trip over.

Nabiki:  (Sigh) Sure brings back memories, don't it?

Ranma:  (Shudders) Yeah, all the painful ones.

Brown-haired Girl:  The nerve of him!  Pulling those perverted stunts
before they can even walk in the door!  (She bows to the Tendo's and
Saotome's)  Sorry about that.  He's usually able to contain himself a
little longer than that before he tries that on someone that he's just met.

Not really... he hadn't even introduced himself before
acosting Naru in the hotspring. :)

(Naru looks confused, but does as she's told.  A few seconds later the
boy crashes down in the exact spot that she had just been standing.)

Naru:  You jerk!  How dare you try to land on me like that!

Boy:  I'll have you know it's incredibly difficult to decide where you're
going to land when you're flying through the air at a very high velocity!

Nabiki:  Wow, he's still alive.

Ranma-chan:  Are you a martial artist or something?

I don't think Ranma would ask that. He'd have made
a decision about Keitarou's abilities from when they
first collided and the subsequent thrashing by the
girls. Besides, non-martial artists get involved in
the Ranma group's affairs all the time.

Kitsune:  (To Akane) Not to sound weird or anything, but your dad
wouldn't happen to be a pervert or anything, would he?

Akane:  What!?

Kitsune:  Well, he will be staying in an all girls dorm, and we've already
got one pervert to worry about.  We can't take to many chances.

Akane:  (Shakes her head) I don't think it's my dad that you'll have to
worry about.

Ranma-chan:  (Angry) Will you shut up, Akane!?

Akane:  (More angry) Don't tell me to shut up, you insensitive jerk!

Akane: Besides, if I wear out my hammer completely, I'll have
to do something with the handle you won't like!

Ranma-chan:  Then quit insinuating that I'm a pervert, you uncute,
sexless tomboy!

POW!!

Sarah:  Wow!  Look at that distance!

Motoko:  She could give Naru a run for her money.

Keitaro:  (Sweatdrops) Where did that hammer come from?

Keitarou: And why does it look so worn?

(They reach the house and see half a dozen women in the front yard.
Three of them, one with dark green hair, one with bluish-grey hair, and
one with purple hair, are sunbathing in swimsuits, one of them a little
more revealing than the others.  Another woman with blonde hair and
tanned skin is chasing around a small furry creature that Ryoga had to
guess was some kind of rabbit.  Another woman with pink hair is fiddling
around with a large device that looked like it might have been some kind
of death ray, and a younger girl with green hair is sweeping the
sidewalk.)

Who's the green-haired girl? No girls with
green hair in Tenchi Muyo.

Grey Haired Woman:  (Squeezing the life out of Tenchi) Tenchi!
Welcome home, did you miss me?

Ryoko's hair is not gray, it's cyan.

Tenchi:  Ry-ok-o, not...so...tight!

Ryoko:  But Tenchi darling, it's been so lonely here without yo-hurk!

(Hands suddenly appear around Ryoko's throat.)

Purple Haired Girl:  Get your hands off Lord Tenchi, you hussy!

Ryoko:  Lay off, Princess Pain-In-The-Ass!  As Tenchi's lover I can do
whatever I want with him.

Ayeka:  You are not Lord Tenchi's lover!  Tenchi doesn't even like you!
He only puts up with you because he's to bighearted to throw you out!

Ryoko:  You'd better take that back, you royal whore!

(The women begin fighting and Tenchi turns back to Ryoga.)

At least you got the characters right. :)

(The pink-haired woman suddenly appears before the Lost Boy.)

PHG:  A cabbit, little boy, is a crossbreed between a rabbit and a cat,
created by yours truly, the great and brilliant Washu!  Hahahahahah!

(Two small puppets appear on Washu's shoulders)

Puppet 1:  Washu is the greatest!

Puppet 2:  The greatest mind in the universe!

Her hair is bright red, and the puppets are
only in Tenchi Universe, not Tenchi Muyo.
If you decide to keep this as derived from
Tenchi Universe, be careful not to mix in
things from the OVAs. For example, no wings
of the lighthawk, and no one is hundreds of
years old, much less thousands. There is no
Tsunami or other goddesses, and Washu is
merely a mad scientist.

(Mihoshi steps forward, and being Mihoshi, trips over nothing and splashes
the water in Ryoga's stunned face.  Ryoga instantly shrinks and vanishes 
into
his clothes, emerging a moment later as a rather irritated P-chan.)

P-chan:  (Indignantly) BWEE!

(There is a long silence, disturbed only by Ryoko and Ayeka's brawling.
Tenchi is speechless.  The women are speechless.  Even the puppets
on Washu's shoulders are speechless.  P-chan nervously stares up at them.
Finally, Tenchi says something intelligible.)

Tenchi:  He's...a pig.

Kiyone:  He is...isn't he?

Ryoko: Now we can have that luau!

Sasami:  What's the matter?

(P-Chan points over to his pile of clothes.)

Sasami:  (Blushes) Oh, I see.  Well then, Tenchi can do it and the rest of
us will just look away, okay?

(P-Chan nods in agreement.  Tenchi pours the water over him and Ryoga
returns to human and dresses quickly.)

Tenchi:  Okay, he's decent now.

The girls turn back around.

Washu: Naughty, naughty, Ryoko! You didn't turn
around!

Ryoko: Hey! I'm a space pirate! I'll look if I
want to.

Hope you liked the first chapter!  Write me and tell me what you think!

It's a decent enough plot. You got it outlined pretty
well with this script format. A couple tweeks and change
to prose and it'd be pretty awesome.

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