"The Eternal Lost Lurker" <lurkerdrome@sbcglobal.net> wrote:
She was, indeed, as stunning as the boy had claimed. She
knelt there beside the spring, preparing herself for her bath
with delicate gestures, naked as the day she was born save for
a yellow bandanna tying back her long, black hair. Her body
Is he wearing a wig? I didn't think they were on the road long enough for
Ryoga's hair to grow *that* much longer.
It was stated in a previous chapter that Ryouga's hair is longer in girl
form. Not sure if it was long enough to be "long", but it WAS stated.
He heard the tapping of a few keys as Nabiki double-checked
this information on her computer.
Would she be able to check that without being dialed up?
Welcome to the broadband age.
It hardly seems likely to me that the Tendos would have broadband, but
it's not important so I won't argue the point.
Maybe I'm oversensitive to negative treatments of Genma
You are. Genma is so far beneath contempt, even child molestors spit on him.
Rubbish, but even if it were true, it would be beside the point.
Bullying a character is beneath a story as good as this one, even if
that chararacter happens to deserve it. In fact, ESPECIALLY if that
character deserves it. Undeserved bullying at least gives me a reason to
cheer for the character to fight back and win.
Well, all I can say is, YAY! A great read, as always, with good
characterization, a gripping plot, and funny comic relief. A little
heavier on
the latter than usual, maybe, but nothing that would undermine the serious
parts. I'm really looking forward to seeing more.
I'd just like to add, since I'm lazy and feel like piggybacking my comments
on someone else's, that I loved the snowboarding scene. ^_^
Gary Kleppe
http://www.garykleppe.org/comics.html
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