Michael A Chase wrote:

Suggested changes: {before : after}

She'd been encased up to her elbows when the batter had finally 
hardened into something not unlike concrete.  

If the cake never made it to the oven, it would make Ranma's 
switcheroo plan a lot harder to pull off.

Ranma didn't forsee how bad the cake mixing would go when he
conceived his switcharoo plan. And after the Reikoku attacked,
the matter kind of got lost in the shuffle.

"There is only one hope," Cologne said.  "I cannot guess what 
Happosai did to get someone to set the Reikoku after him.  I don't 
even really know who might have such power in this day.  But you must 
find him, and discover what he has done."

It's a little odd that Cologne knows so much about the Reikoku but 
doesn't know about the Temple of Three.  Checking out possible senders 
might be a useful line of investigation at least.

It may be a bit odd, but since everything from Chapter 2 to 
about Chapter 16 hinges on her not knowing about the Temple,
I think I'm going to have to stick with it as is. <grin>

Thanks for the comments,
Grayson Towler
http://www.talesfromthevault.com/relentless



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