bet you thought I forgot about this one:

Not really. I figured it would be a while if you were going to do it at
all. No rush. ^_^

Hmm. What American names. I'm stunned. :)

You're keeping up well so far.

   Kiva pushed him roughly aside and grabbed the glass jar in one

hand.

She quickly twisted the lid off with the other and offered it to

Coop.

Heh. Nice. I can never get the damn tops off either. Although I still

think

the best gag with that was one Peter David did during his X-Factor

run.

Haven't seen or read that. But I'm sure it's a common joke by now.
Dragon Tails probably used it at least ten times.

   "Are you sure you don't want some of my Coop Extreme?" Coop

offered,

gesturing to the foodstuff that covered most of the counter and

towered

over even the lanky Jamie.

Dagwood would be proud.

And Blondie would probably be furious.

   "It was a joke," Kiva pointed out. "I wouldn't touch that thing

if

it was the only food in the house."
   Coop stared at her and blinked.

Too bad that's not a joke.

Well, it was until she realized it was true.

specks and the uniforms could hardly be recognized as identical to
Kiva's. She had to squint to make out any details at all,

drop 'at all'

Good point.

   "Yes, it is," snapped Kiva, finally turning the projector off.
   Jamie ignored her heated

drop heated, since we know it is

I don't think the sentence parses quite right without an adjective
there.

   Kiva quickly pulled the disc out of his reach. "Even if I thought
you could build a new battery, I wouldn't let you within a hundred

feet

of the raw materials."

He might make it into a sandwich, eh?

Actually, there's more to Coop's personality than his stomach. He is
pretty handy with electronics, including having repaired Megas after it
was sent back from the future. The things he builds work well enough for
the most part, unless the alternative is funnier.

   "So, what's it a picture of?" asked Jamie.
   "My battalion from the future,"

Wow! A whole battalion fit in the picture? No wonder she can't make

out

anyone in it.

Eh, I just don't know anything about military terminology. I'll take
Pete's suggestion and make it "platoon".

   "Hey, relax!" Jamie said defensively. "It didn't really happen!

Kiva

just said what if!"

The road to fanfic hell is paved with those two words.

And here I thought it was paved with Mary Sues and the original versions
of MST 6.7 stories.

Heh. Nice humor here

The boar scene took quite a bit of work and a lot of prereader support.
Good to see that it came out well.

   "Me, cook? No way!" Coop protested.

Double heh.

One would think Coop would be an expert cook, but cooking is work.

   "Don't think I haven't tried," Coop said defensively. "I used

four

whole rolls of duck

duct

Actually, no. "Duct tape" is more of a misnomer than anything else. Duck
tape was originally created for U.S. Military use and got its name
because it was waterproof like duck down. When it moved into the
mainstream of home repair as a handy adhesive for duct work, some
companies sold it in a different color and called it "duct tape". The
difference is that duct tape is a subset of duck tape that conforms to
certain temperature standards. See
http://www.octanecreative.com/ducttape/duckvsduct.html for more details.

Also, even if "duct tape" were the only correct term, it would be "duck
tape" in the Megas XLR universe. You'll have to trust me on that one.

   "Nah. I always write 'NO' on the start button. Otherwise, why

would

I ever press it?"

Such backward logic, I approve. Makes me want to watch Megas too, BTW

I was hoping to create a bit of interest in Megas with this story. If
only I'd been able to finish it before CN decided to postpone/cancel the
series.

   Eighty-seven minutes later, Coop wiped his hands triumphantly and
stepped out of the car that formed Megas' cockpit onto the waiting

hand.

Megas lowered him to the ground, and he hopped off. "There you go,

Kiva.

You're all set."

Hmm. I might have seen part of an episode of that. And I think the

Mystery

Machine lose a drag race with it on CN.

I think I remember that short as well.

   "I'll miss you too,"

you, too

Oh, right. Oops.

   The three children raced up the ramp toward the security door.
"That's it!" shouted Asuka. "That has to be the door to the hangar!"
   "But we've been going uphill!" Shinji protested, panting from the
long run. "If anything, that door probably leads back outside."

Ah. I remember this episode.

I hope so. If I had the DVDs handy, I'd have watched them to try to get
the dialogue a bit closer to the original, but I'm waiting to see if
they release a Platinum Edition boxed set. Probably not, but by the time
I find out, I'll be able to buy the series in bulk at a discount anyway.

   Suddenly, as if announcing the world's most inappropriately timed
Monty Python sketch, a giant metal foot stomped on the spiderlike

Angel,

crushing it.

But appropriate for this fic.

I don't think there was much comedy in Eva that didn't center around
Misato, except for the "thermal expansion" bit.

 Streams of green and orange goo squirted out, splashing the

nearby buildings and the three children inside the base. They

ignored

the mess, however, as all three of them raptly

drop 'raptly'

Awww... but I like it! I'll get rid of it though. I guess they're not
really staring if they don't know where they're supposed to be looking.

   "It said, 'Ew, that was disgusting. I hate spiders, especially

the

ones with lots of eyes,'" Rei translated.

I think that's all of them.

Not many of them have as many eyes as the Angel did, though, nor do they
cover that much of their bodies.

Very nice idea fic. Nice to see humor in the Evaverse, though we do

have

Dual! if we want that, I suppose.

Haven't seen Dual either, but that sounds like a recommendation to me. I
plan to get back to this story once I can accumulate enough Eva DVDs...
it's been a while since I last saw the series, and I want to get the
details I need right. But there are plenty of gags left to use, as well
as some interesting twists on the plot of the anime. Glad you enjoyed it
so far, and thanks for the comments.

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