Suggested changes: {before : after}
On 02/24/2005 09:49 PM, DB Sommer said:
Well, that wasn't exactly true. It was an overcast and drizzly
afternoon, but that seemed too mundane for the seriousness of the
mission, Pink noted to herself. So she mentally took literary license
to make the situation more dark and foreboding, setting the proper
mood. After all, she wanted people to read her memoirs, and at least
one chapter was going to be devoted to her and Link's journey of
revenge against that awful Joketzusoku who had dared to ambush Link
and disgrace her in front of the whole village. The cowardly bitch
had the audacity to attack Link for no reason, strip her naked, tie
her up, leave her in the middle of the village, and write on her
backside "Professional slut taking on all comers. Enter here," with
arrows pointing to her pussy. While everyone had better sense than to
take advantage of the situation, someone had taken pictures of her
predicament. Despite the twin's efforts, the photos were {widely
circulating around : everywhere}. Everyone whispered behind Link's
back, and would shut up whenever she came around. Already she was
talking about moving to another village once their mission of
righteous vengeance was complete.
As always, Link gets it in the ... ah ... chin for something Pink's done.
"It all started forty years ago, when a terrible battle raged on the
mountaintop. A demon of tremendous size and voracious appetite tried
to {decimate : destroy} all of Japan. But such great evil ever draws
great heroes. He was contested by the champions of five clans. Each
was a powerful fighter that could fend off a small army
single-handed. It was perhaps the greatest concentration of power in
the history of Japan.
"You're just trying to muscle in {some : on some of the} royalties,"
Pink huffed.
Oh horrors! I guess I'll have to reread the earlier chapters before the
entire new one comes out. :}b