And on to the next:

If anyone's interested, when I wrote this chapter I
loved it.  My ardor has cooled considerably since
then, as it always does, but it still has some bits

Heh. I'm almost always the opposite. It takes me so long to write things
out, it feels like everything I wrote must be dragging. But the flow on the
finished product is almost always better than what I imagined it was.

-----
Hikaru had to admit the Mad Thinker had a very
appropriate name. He was clearly quite bright. And he
was also clearly insane. For example, the Fantastic
Four had brought him in just last week, and he'd
escaped using a bottle of soda and a plastic whistle.

You know, the real Mad Thinker really is a genius. He's already in jail, but
since he can project his consciousness into any of his hundred of robots on
the outside, there's little anyone can do with him. Always liked that about
him. He really does come across as a cold, calculating genius.

"See, Daisy!

Ooo. I hated that series.

"Umm, my name's not Daisy," said Nozomi Kaihara, who'd
been fastened to the wall next to the Thinker.

Not really familiar with that series at all

"You always say that!" laughed the Mad Thinker, his
green trenchcoat swirling around him as he turned
towards her.

Oh, it's the anime guy from Daisy. Okay, I want to see his ass kicked now.

"But you always realize I'm right

eventually."

Nozomi blinked. "We've never met before," she said
quietly.

The Mad Thinker gave a fond, forgiving shake of the
head. "You say that a lot too.

lot, too

Hikaru twisted past the robot's fist. Oh, yeah, that
was the Mad Thinker-a real character. Calling him a
few cans short of a six-pack didn't do him
justice-Hikaru doubted the man had enough juice left
to fill a shot glass. He deflected the robot's ray
beam. Hikaru was really getting sick of the damn
thing. He'd tried to magnetize it, but it was
apparently made of some carbon-weave polymer. He'd
tried to melt it, but it apparently ran on ambient
heat, and so all he'd gotten was one excited robot. As
for simply blowing it up, the thing was harder to
destroy than the Rolling Stones' careers. Hikaru
sighed. There were times he wished he wasn't so
sarcastic. It made it hard to listen to himself at
times, and as that situation was unavoidable for him,
it was only more bitter.

Heh

He barely avoided the explosive shell the robot fired
at him. Concentrate on the killer robot, stupid, his
mind thought vocally. As the mechanical monster
launched a series of shrapnel grenades at him, he had
to remind himself not to panic. He could handle this.
He was Dr. Strange, who regularly defeated demonic
invasions, sinister monsters, and men who had the
audacity to attempt world conquest while wearing
form-fitting body stockings. He really hated that last
bunch. Some parts of the human anatomy were meant to
stay hidden in his book.

Amen

The robot sprouted several more arms and started
firing micromissiles at him. Hikaru gulped. Okay, he
could handle this. But help would be nice.

The wall behind him toppled over. Hikaru smiled
slightly. Help had arrived. Nadia rushed in, followed
by the rest of the motley crew Hikaru happened to call
allies. Hikaru glanced at Nadia "Glad to see you guys.
Now, how did you beat those robots?

Nadia smiled awkwardly. "We sort of didn't. They're
hot on our tails."

Hikaru's face fell. "What?"

"Hot on our tails," repeated Nadia. "In eager pursuit.
Following us."

Kagome blinked and pointed ahead. "Hey-that robot's
readying that gravity cannon thing the one you threw
into a bus used!"

That sounded a bit off. Was she supposed to be rambling at top speed?

Hikaru rolled his eyes. "You know, that's one thing
I've learned in this business it's never

either need a period or semi-colon to break things up.

 say 'this

couldn't possibly get worse', because it always can.
On fire? You can jump into gasoline. Chased by a rabid
dog? A pack of them can come from the other direction.
Dealing with a chainsaw-wielding homicidal maniac? A
six-armed man-eating demon can kill him."

Yep

"Well, you've covered all the angles," said Nadia
quietly.

"As opposed to your outfit," commented Hikaru.

Aww. They're flirting. How sweet.

"Ha ha, wench!" he chuckled arrogantly. "Do you
actually think you're a match for the genius of the
Thinker?" He pulled an exceedingly elaborate device
from his belt. "Face the power of my vibro-beam!" He
fired. The silvery blast knocked Nadia off her feet.
"You see Daisy!

see, Daisy

They'll never separate us, not while I

can draw breath and my various weapons of mass
destruction

actually they're tactical weapons, not mass weapons.

Hikaru bit his lip. "Okay. Don't worry. I've got an
idea-it'll just require me to temporarily alter the
laws of physics.

But magic does that all the time anyway. :)

A drenched Hikaru glanced at the rushing water. "My
thanks to you, children of the Furor. Now I ask you to
remember your mother, the Calm One." The water died
down. Hikaru glanced at the others. "Sorry about that.
Water spirits can get a bit-enthusiastic at times."

Inu-Yasha spat out a mouthful of water. "A bit.?"

Hey, it worked, and caused a minimum off fuss.

-----

Miroku glanced at her. "I'm a bit surprised you took
his suggestion for a name."

"It was better than the competition," she replied.

"Oh, for the last time, 'Amphibious Lass'

The Aqualung is a great name too.

"Ahh. Earth. A tiny, blue sphere, the color of its
vast deserts, sleeping unaware."

"Oceans, Captain."

"Wha-?"

Lieutenant Mar-Vell sighed. "Oceans. The blue of Earth
is from its vast oceans, not deserts."

Heh

Captain Lum Oni, commanding officer of the Oni Empire
Dreadnaught Class Vessel Tcha, stared at her
subordinate, her eyes showing her vast store of
confusion. "Oh," she said slowly. "I see." She gave a
sudden shake of her head. "Well, my point still
stands-they are unprepared for the herald of
GALACTUS!" She raised her fist triumphantly.
"Teeheeheehee-tcha!"

Mar-Vell winced. Miss Lum really hadn't gotten the
whole threatening laugh thing down yet.

It makes her foes underestimate her is all.

-----

In downtown Tokyo, something was happening.

"So, Arika, the green monster rampaging in downtown
Tokyo is not Godzilla shrunk down to ten feet?"

That did happen to Big G once. SHIELD hit him with Pym Particals to make him
more managable. It didn't take for long, though.

"That is correct, Ken," said Arika Miamata, reporter.
"Godzilla was spotted off the shore of Okinawa just an
hour ago, looking, to quote local residents 'a bit
cranky'."

Dr. Demoncious should be after him soon, then. :)

He coughed awkwardly, then turned. "Well, seeing as
nothing substantial has happened yet, we will now fill
some airtime with expert commentary. Joining us
now-noted scientist, Dr. Iwata." He turned to a
white-haired gentleman with a scarred face. "Dr.
Iwata-nice to see you."

Is he from anything, by chance?

"Thank you, Ken. Always a pleasure to appear on
television."

"Now, Dr. Iwata-what is it that makes monsters
rampage?"

"Well, Ken," said Dr. Iwata thoughtfully, "my personal
theory is it's because they're evil."

Heh

Ooneda nodded. "Fascinating."

In the Gosunkugi residence something was also
happening.

"See, Hikaru! He's evil! A doctor said so! We have
to-"

"No, Kagome."

Heh, again

Both happenings involved surprisingly little of what
could in fact be called 'activity'.

"Ahh, yes, and now the police are rolling in," came
Arika's voice.

Kagome glanced back at Hikaru. "See! The police! If
the police are there, we should be to!

be, too

"Because they OPENED FIRE ON HIM!" shouted Hikaru. He
glanced at the others. "I'd rampage if that happened
to me! Wouldn't you?"

Inu-Yasha shrugged. "I guess."

"I'd probably just maraud

is that the correct spelling?

"Okay, okay, can you reestablish the link?" came Arika
Miamata. A jumpy picture came on, of Arika kneeling
behind some wreckage. "Ken-it's a madhouse here. The
monster has in a short while produced a radius of
damage more appropriate to force of nature then a
living thing." She gestured upwards. The camera rose
to capture an image of the bandana-wearing creature
smashing a police car.

Hulk: It's what Hulk does. But it all Ranma's fault.

"You're not because you lack the spine to deal with a
real problem! You'd rather bury your head in the sand
while things crumble to pieces around you!" She spat.

she spat

Nadia smiled. "I may be an amnesiac, but I haven't
forgotten about human nature." She picked up a lemon
square. "No man who uses the word 'whilst' regularly
is ever quite secure in his masculinity.

True. I don't think I've ever used it in my life. :)

Lt. Mar-Vell entered Captain Oni's quarters, a
computer readout in his hands. "Miss Lum, I'm honored
to report that we have selected your opponent for this
world."

Hey, she's still a step up from his mainstream superior, Col. Yon-Rogg.

Ironically, I think Mar-Vell might have been the first guy to lose his love 
interest only a dozen issues or so in. Some, like Pym, lost a love in their 
origin, and some, like Spider man and Gwen Stacy, lose them after a long 
time, but few heroes lose them after a handful of issues passed.

"Oh." A smile came over her face. "Well, I do like
being squeaky cwean! Teeheeheehee-tcha!" She went back
to reading it, then snarled. She tore the readout into
pieces, and threw the scraps to the ground.
"Disgusting!" she spat. "Once again your "random"
selection process gives me an opponent who's a joke!"

Hmm. Hikaru, I wonder?

Lt. Mar-Vell took a deep breath. "Captain, we Kree
have some experience with these Earthlings. While
technologically backwards-and this is changing-they
show a marked propensity for supernormal ability.

Mar-Vell: Hell, we pumped a bunch of them full of Terrigen Mist and made a 
whole city of them with super powers. Downright Inhuman they are, now.
^_^

Lum raised her hand defiantly. "Lieutenat,

definitely misspelled that one

I am Lum

Oni! Time upon time have I faced my opponents, and
each time they have fallen. And you would say I'm
unprepared? You would deny me a glorious battle?" She
pouted. "I haven't had one of those since I wiped out
the Saiyin hordes single-handedly during the Frieza
incident!" She smiled. "Teeheeheehee-tcha! That was
fun! Especially the way they'd stand there grunting,
for hours on end!"

"You relish in victories nobly won, Captain, but do
not forget that duty comes before glory," said
Mar-Vell.

"alphabetically, I mean." he added.

"Nothing comes before glory!" shouted Lum. "Mar-Vell I

Mar-Vell, I

seize at things that seem beyond my reach. That is the
source of my legend!" Yeoman Una

Heh. There she is

"Don't be ridiculous," said Hikaru. "Kagome and
Inu-Yasha squabble. Nadia and I banter. It's a
completely different phenomena."

True

"A Japan that fully owns up to the atrocities of the
past, and can no longer be swayed by the brutal,
fascistic symbols of Empire," answered Hikaru.

Kagome: Don't be silly. We're the best, and it's our destiny to rule. 
Someday. Just not today.

Kagome blinked. "I was thinking a frozen cappuccino."

Heh. Cute

"They should be scared," said Hikaru. "The Black
Dragon Party is out, in all its glory! Iron-plated
soldiers have appeared on our streets! As well as a
gigantic, hammer-wielding lesbian!" He shook his head.
"Truly I fear for our nation."

He forgot to mention the wierd saucer that shot at all the heroes. Poison 
One. :)

"Oh, for goodness sakes, Hikaru!" said Miroku. "You
can't mean that attractive gaijin is. odd-you just
can't!"

"Miroku, firstly that woman practically has 'Female
Steelworker' plastered to her forehead," said Hikaru.
"Secondly, she isn't that attractive."

Heh. I see you're going for irony here.

"Only the Bulgarian car type," Hikaru clarified. "You
know-big, blocky, with the parts sized slightly
wrong."

Eh, Akane's proportional. Six feet of proportions, but still propotional

Inu-Yasha shook his head. "Come on, Hikaru. This is
catty even fer you."

Hikaru sighed and slouched back in his chair. "Well,
I'm just tired of doing so much and receiving so
little, while others do so little and receive somuch."

so much

A mild rain shower began. Hikaru glanced resentfully
up at the sky. "Also, I'm tired of this outdoor
restaurant, but that is something I expect to resolve
shortly."

Nadia shrugged, as the rain began to cease. "It's not
that bad." She looked at him. "And you're usually the
last person to care what people think of you."

"And I still am!" shouted Hikaru. "I don't do this for
applause, you know! Unlike the freaking Fantastic
Four! But they and every other gloryhound in the city
is

are

Nadia shook her head. "Hikaru, I have to say, you're
the only person I know who can be manic and depressive
at the same time."

Hikaru looked at her bleakly. "You're an amnesiac,
Nadia. You have no idea who you know."

Nadia smiled. "And that tells you how strong an
impression you make."

true

"Don't insult the Fantastic Four," came a slurred
voice.

"Quiet, Kagome," snapped Hikaru.

"That-wasn't Kagome," said Miroku gesturing across the
street.

Hikaru blinked. "You're right. I just assumed it was
her on the grounds that it sounded very. Kagome-like."

"Well," continued the voice's owner belligerently, "It
was actually very. Saori-like." The voice's owner was
in fact a tall woman with purple hair. She sat at a
table across the street, a large glass punctuated with
a paper umbrella before her, her head resting on the
tabletop. "Saori Kiddo.

Hmm. From Saint Seiya? I think the name might be mispelled though

"So what is the difference between a science ninja,
and a ninja ninja?" he continued casually.

"Science ninjas dress up like birds, and use more
explosives," answered Saori dourly.

Heh

Hikaru's head slammed onto the table. "Nadia?"

Nadia glanced at him. "Yes, Hikaru?"

"A quick lesson."

"I'm listening."

"Those who insist there is no justice often have
justice violently practiced upon them."

Nod nod

The Hulk got back to his feet with little effort.
"Puny girl almost as strong as Hulk," he muttered, the
surprise in his voice evident.

Only in water.

The Hulk watched the half-demon recede into the
distance with a satisfied look on his face. That look
vanished when a large section of lamppost struck the
back of his head. "If you want a fight, freak, you
better be ready for one!" said Onizuka, twirling the
broken section of lamppost in his hands.

Not bad, but I now remember, I might need the Iron Fist name, since the 
ability will pop up at some point and I might need it. Onizuka, Master of 
Kung Fu, would be fine,though. There is no Shang Chi in this universe.

Nadia and Saori slammed onto the Hulk's back. The
giant slammed

used 'slammed' twice, Might want to use something different.

 > The Hulk stood, growling in frustration. Nadia glanced

at Saori. "All right-what powers does Iron Fist have?"

See. "Master of Kung Fu' really works now.

Hikaru smiled enigmatically. "Sometimes the way of
subtlety requires us to travel through the magical
valleys of excess and overkill."

Now that is a classic line. Congrats.

-----

"Magnificent," muttered Lum in the Tcha's control
room.

Lt. Mar-Vell glanced up from the Imperial dispatches
(where, he noted, Vash the Warlock's

Actually I might be using Adam Warlock at some point.

 bounty had

reached 60,000,000 wulong, easily surpassing the
rewards offered for such infamous space pirates as
Captain Harlock, Kagato the Mad God, Queen Emeraldis,
Starfox, Ryoko the Demon of Destruction and her
occasional partner Washu the Goblin).

Everyone else is cool.

Lum scowled. "Not only is it a good idea, it's such a
good idea that I'm going to reward myself for having
it. Yeoman Una! Get me a fudge sundae! With cherries
on top! And rainbow sprinkles! Teeheeheehee-tcha!"
Mar-Vell sighed. There was, he felt, something
inherently humiliating in having been conquered by a
race who considered finger-painting the epitome of
high art, and whose first extraplanetary rocket had
consisted of balsa wood, and a great deal of
gunpowder.

That it achieved that much shows persistance.

-----

As the Hulk's might

mighty

It should be pointed out that the sighting of the Hulk
in an outdoor restaurant district was reported to the
police, and placed on file with the other 2687
reported Hulk sightings, including in a movie theater,
up a tree, and in a next-door neighbor's yard.

Hmm. That last paragraph fell very flat. I'd cut it.

Hikaru's eyes darted nervously around. "Either onboard
an alien spaceship, or attending the biggest, most
technically advanced Gundam convention the world has
ever seen."

Heh

The various crew members stood at attention as a tall
voluptuous women

woman (and I didn't think of Lum as voluptuous, A difference for a reason)

"Of course," he said with a bow. "Hail Emperor
Jariten! Lord of the Universe! Master of All! King of
Uru! Son of Emperor Lan! Grandson of Emperor Han!
Cracker of the the Ctarl-Ctarl! Slaughterer of the
Skrull! Basher of the Baddoon! Shatterer of the
Shi'ar! Terrorizer of the Tengu! Pulveriser of the
Plodex! Destroyer of the D'Bray! Ruiner of the
Raalgon!"

Nice mix of anime and Marvel races there

"What?" said Lum baffled.

"A metaphorical expression, Miss Lum," said an
intelligent looking

intelligent-looking

"I'm glad you asked that!" squealed Lum. She stood up,
and looked down at her captives imposingly.
"Earthlings, you have been chosen to face me, the
Herald of Galactus!" She brought out a whistle and
blew it. Lt. Mar-Vell, and Yeoman Una spread a large
diagram behind the Oni. Lum gestured at it proudly.
"Yes, the Galactus Interstellar Raceway! Largest of
its kind to be constructed! The Interstellar raceway
that's fun for the whole family!"

Heh. Nice swerve

"Remind me again why we're naming this after the
Devourer?" whispered Una.

"It's part of Emperor Ten's 'Please Don't Eat Us'
plan," answered Mar-Vell.

Heh, again

Hikaru glanced at Nadia. "If I asked you, would you
snap my neck?"

"Only if you gave me a cyanide capsule for
afterwards," answered Nadia.

Hikaru stroked his chin. "I've got to consider that
one."

"Come one!"

on

"Oh, complain, complain," said Lum. "The Shi'ar said
the same sort of things when Emperor Gong took their
homeworld for a pool game and we moved them to Vegar
Seven! But that worked out great in the end! Didn't
it, Ensign D'Ken?"

Another nice one. It is kind of mysterious how he was never used beyond his 
initial appearance, though.

"No, Miss Lum. There are no Skrull around anywhere. At
all. There haven't been for centuries. You Oni
massacred them in a series of atrocities so horrific,
that even we Kree, hereditary enemies of the Skrull,
who loathed their very existence, were filled with
pity and outrage at what had been done."

"So no Skrull?" asked Lum.

Except the ones that changed themselves into other things, which is, you 
know, one of their abilites. :)

"So, Earthlings, do you accept my challenge?" shouted
Lum.

Hikaru glanced around. Nadia stared at Lum
resentfully, fists clenched. Miroku was drooling in
lust. Inu-Yasha was glancing around nervously. The
Hulk was snoring, having apparently dozed off in the
act of picking his nose. Iron Fist and Ms. Power were
also drooling in lust.

"Look at those tiny horns," said Onizuka.

"And those great big knockers," added Saori.

Hmm. I think you had the speakers mixed up there.

"Hey-my coffee only puts some people in the hospital."
Onizuka glanced down at the stew. "That stuff will
probably take out anybody."

The Hulk grabbed the pot, guzzled it down, then tossed
it away. "Food good!" he said happily, followed by a
burp.

Heh. Cast iron stomach, all right

"I suggest we use teams of two," stated Nadia. "Except
for the Hulk, who can best take care of himself, and
is-ill-suited for teamwork." She glanced over her
allies. "I suggest Ms. Power and Iron Fist,

Hmm. I see now what you were going for. The Heroes for Hire. Okay, go ahead 
and use IF. I can work around it. I always prefered IF's best foe, Steel 
Serpent, anyway.

 Son of

Satan and Devil-Slayer, and of course, you and I."

"An excellent idea," said Hikaru. He glanced at the
others. "What do you guys think?"

"Ooh, pretty flowers for hammer girl," said the Hulk,
plucking a clump of what looked like sunflowers.

Good point

"Was that chick comin' on to me?" gulped Inu-Yasha.

"That tiger skin bikini," murmured a leering Miroku.

Heh

"Hulk no hurt horn girl. She not hurt Hulk. Hulk no
like hurt girls unless they hurt Hulk first." The
giant made a huge shrug. "Horn girl nice to Hulk. Give
food! Pretty flowers for hammer girl!" The Hulk
sheepishly raised his bouquet.

They need not worry. She'll pop him at some point and he'll enter the fight

Nadia smirked at him. "That's something I'm going to
have to check one of these days." She started walking
away.

Hikaru had an impulse to blush but he suppressed it.

Heh. It's not banter. It's flirting, I tell ya

Miroku's sentence was cut short by Lum's knocking him
on the back of the head. Inu-Yasha turned and drew his
sword, then charged at her, swinging. Lum leapt up,
and landed on the blade, the rushed forward, and
downed him with an uppercut.

The last words he heard were, "Sorry, darling", which
inspired such terror in him that even the knowledge
he'd been right was no comfort.

Heh. I'd think the knowledge he was right would make him feel worse.

-----

Hikaru looked at her. "Don't forget, I agreed with
your ideas. I should have seen it too." He shook his
head. "And I feel like an especial idiot for
complaining about nobody paying attention to things,
and then letting myself miss the obvious. That girl
had an itch for Inu-Yasha any fool could see, and I
managed to ignore the likelihood that she'd go after
him first."

"Well," said Onizuka, cracking his knuckles, "let's go
get him. I figure a little ass-kicking will make
everything better."

Saori nodded. "Hear, hear."

Nadia shook her head. "No-she's expecting this. That's
one of the reasons she didd

did

-----

"Teeheeheehee-tcha!" Lum smiled at the captive
Inu-Yasha, as swung from the tree branch. "You know,
when I wing

win

Lum smiled at him fondly. "Oh my silly little darling!
If I don't bwow up your silly ol' planet, then my
cousin Ten'll kill me, which means you'll be sad,
'cause I'll be dead." She embraced him passionately.
"See! I'm destroying the Earth because I love you!"

Well, she does have a point

"And let's not forget we'll be de

drop 'de'

Lum smiled at him, then glanced at Nadia. The
Sub-Mariner's mouth clenched. "I chose you well,"
muttered the Oni. She raised her hand, and waved them
in. Hikaru and Nadia rushed together as one. Lum

Wonder why Hikaru doesn't try his forte, spells, against her

connected at once. Lum stiffened to remain standing,
then smiled. A circle of energy emanated from her,
knocking her opponents back. She gathered more energy
to her, readying a blast. As she let it loose, Hikaru
created a shimmering wall before him and his
companions, blocking the blast. Lum was knocked
backwards in the backlash, tumbling to the ground.

There we go

Hikaru blinked. "The big green dope is now a big green
pig."

Maybe she'll think he's cute.

"Hulk lose flowers for pretty hammer girl," he
whimpered.

Hikaru reached into his cloak and pulled out the
Hulk's crude bouquet. Nadia stared at him. "Okay, now
how did you do THAT?"

Bah. Every magician knows the old flower from the cloack trick. Even the 
ones that can't use magic.

"Wow," said Inu-Yasha. "What are they called?"

Miroku paled. "I, uh, really didn't progress far
enough in meditation myself to know their names.
However, when the big wheels at the monastery
meditated, they did it the way he does."

Inu-Yasha stared at Miroku for a moment. "Ya really
sucked as a monk, didnchya?"

Miroku sighed. "Sadly, yes."

Heh. Surprised he can admit it.

She crawled towards the cairn of stones Hikaru had put
up for just this purpose, and knocked them over.

Methinks it'll still fall on Hikaru's shoulders to succeed here

"Stupid magician not talk," said the Hulk with
surprising gentleness. "Him real hurt."

Hikaru glanced around at his gathered allies.
"Who's-taking care of Captain Oni?"

"You covered that," answered Nadia calmly.

Lum slowly stood to her feet, her face now scowling.
She made a tottering effort to stand upright, and then
managed to step forward. Then a large staff hit her in
the back. She fell to the ground. Miroku deftly rolled
in front of her, and readied his hand to strike.

"That's it Miroku!" shouted Hikaru. "Grab them!" The
hand struck. Hikaru winced. "Wrong them."

Heh

Somehow, Hikaru thought Invader would gladly blow up
the Earth if his daughter was summarily jilted.

Probably

"The second was Chai against the Ctarl'Ctarl, who
chose exile and shame, dying in dishonor and disgrace.
And so the name of Chai is forever anathema."

"The third was Bo against the Puchuus, and of his
fate, like the Puchuus themselves, we do not speak,
save in a hushed whispers in the dead of night."

Ha! Good one

Lum was silent for awhile, then coughed awkwardly. She
glanced at her former opponents. "So-any of you know a
place I can stay?"

Heh

Saori was looking at her approvingly. "I hear you're a
superhero yourself. If you ever want some-hands on
training."

"Statutory," coughed Onizuka.

HAHAHA! That was a great line

"And I thought you two were reckless drunks," answered
Hikaru. "We were both right, but we also both more
fundamentally wrong." He smiled. "Take care you two."

Aww. How sweet

As the door shut, Nadia glanced at Hikaru. "Aren't you
a little worried about this?"

"SIT!" came Kagome's offended voice.

Yeah. Saw that coming

Nadia stared at him for a moment, then burst out
laughing. "You thought I was-" She smiled and shook
her head

Hmm. That was all I got. Seems like that was the end. A problem with my 
server I believe I have corrected, finally. Nice job. Everything flowed 
well, you had a number of one advaenture hangers on, like in the original 
Defenders, and you made IY life more difficult. Also liked some of the lines 
and banter between Nadia and Hikaru. All in all, another great read. Thanks 
for sharing.

DB Sommer



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