On Wed, 26 Jan 2005 00:18:51 +0800, "Christian Clark" <twh@operamail.com> wrote:

-- She noticed the pause in her cousin's dialog, but said nothing as he continued.
I would say "narrative" rather than "dialog".

-- She blinked in surprised.
"Surprise" without 'd'.

-- Neji's curiosity got the better of him as he asked, “what did he have
   to say?”
Somehow he doesn't strike me as a type who would let that happen. He would
use other means to prompt her.

-- And he's earned your respect, hasn't he?
Man, isn't she getting bold... and it's only the beginning...

Notes:  I admit to liking Hinata a lot.  She's such a little darling!
Like one of those little kitten motivational posters.  <93>Hang in there,
kitty!  Friday's coming.<94> :)

I share the sentiment. Hinata is adorable, and the ruthless world of Naruto's
universe is not a good place for her.

Overall, interesting continuation, although I think it's too hopeful.
If we follow internal logics of the story, Hinata is destined to go on
and become the next Anko at best; but very likely to get killed on a
mission, if not worse. If she rebels against the family, it's only
going to make her suffer more. But oh well. It's not like Naruto is
terribly realistic, and the main and secondary characters keep getting
saved in the last moment.

Greetings,
-- Pete

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