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Michael A Chase wrote:
Suggested changes: {before : after}
On 01/08/2005 10:41 PM, DB Sommer said:
Wow. The last chapter. Who'd a thunk it?
Hey, it could happen. :}b
I've completed a number of longer fics. For that I am proud of myself. Not
claiming they're high quality, but they are complete.
Kei stared at Yuri, horrified "You idiot! He wasn't' supposed to know
that!"
How is he supposed to not know. It was probably the first thing he
hacked out of the local computers.
Yep. This was a case of Iria assuming Mikeal would just trust her and not
try to look. Naive, to be certain.
"You know, if you keep pacing like that, you're going to wear a hole
through
the deck plating, and then our air will get sucked out and we'll
implode,"
Killgore said.
Wouldn't that be explode?
Hmm. That people imploded in a vaccum, but i might be wrong.
Iria scoffed at the suggestion. "They're just ditching you and are using
that as a {pretence : pretense} since they don't want to be open about
it. Frankly, I
don't blame them."
Used the grammar comments, as always.
And then Iria broke off the kiss, backed away, and struck him hard in
the
face with a right hook.
I guess he might have been ready for her knee.
Heh. Actually never occurred to me to have her use that.
He opened a line to the commander of the orbital platform. Luckily,
Springer
had the foresight to designate Killgore an official 'advisor' from YSC,
which gave him nearly as much pull as the commander himself. "This is
Killgore. The woman that has been traveling with me has become a threat
to
the ship. I need one... no, two squads of your best men to go down to
the
guest suite and eliminate her with extreme prejudice. Regard her as a
Class
1 threat. Get confirmation on the kill, meaning I want a body that can
be
ID'd. Outside of that, do whatever it takes to get the job done. YSC
will
cover any losses. Killgore out."
That seems stupid, they should plant a very large explosive charge under
the path she's walking. Every inch of it. They can use DNA analysis
later if they really want a positive ID.
Too much destruction of their property. Actually, their plan to gas her
would have worked if she hadn't bugged Killgore.
"Delta-One, this is Flight Control. You're right on target. Proceed
through
the hanger and to the designated landing pad. Flight Control over and
out."
Sergeant Milgrew cut the comlink and watched both his instruments and
visually through the transparent {plexiglass : Plexiglas} that separated
the control room
from the landing bay as the ship settled gracefully into its proper
berth.
Though it's probably not trademarked by then.
Yeah. My thoughts on it.
Zeiram was really and truly dead. This time for good.
Only if they destroy all the samples.
Anton did that when he left, he didn't want them sending another five
Zeirams after him and his one. The only sample left is the one the woman has
at the end.
"We're going to get blamed for another planet getting destroyed!" Kei
completed her partner's line of thinking, one they had engaged in far
too
often for their liking.
But. It's not their fault!
Well, it's not. Not that anyone will believe it.
Leaving the fighter on auto-pilot, Adelpha removed the object from her
pocket and looked it over. The small cylinder with these 'Zeiram cells'
was
the key to making Adelpha rich. It was only a matter of finding someone
interested in them and selling them, then she'd be set for life.
The sort that want to buy Zeiram cells probably won't want to leave any
witnesses.
She's not thinking about the big picture at the moment.
Wow! It's finished. Who would have thought it would take, oh, what was
it?
Five years or so to finish this story. Sorry it took me so long, but I
kept
at it until what you have here is the end. Thanks to all those who stuck
with it to the end. I really appreciate it.
So when does the sequel come out?
I hate that question. By now I think most readers realize that I rarely wrap
any sizable multichapter fic in a neat little bow. Like real life, things
don't wrap up that easily. Besides, someone famous said always leave the
audiance wanting more. I kind of like that philosophy. Do enough to get the
main story done, but a loose end or two can leave some of things to the
reader's imagination.
Thanks for all the help.
DB Sommer
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