Suggested changes: {before : after}
On 01/04/2005 12:51 PM, hkmiller said:
"Oh, you think so, do you? You think terrorism is easy, do you?
Well, let's just see how you handle things!" The sole ski- masked
terrorist set to guard them strode over ominously. Bending down, he
untied the ropes on Tomo, helped her to stand, and handed her a spare
ski-mask, which he then helped her to don.
That seems, somehow, excessive.
"Sure! Just watch this!" Tomo turned and pointed the automatic rifle
at her friends and classmates, then fired a burst just above their
heads into the wall. Drywall {flagments : fragments} flew
everywhere, pelting the shocked girls.
"Huh. If they get killed, I'll have to learn new seating
arrangements. That's bad. On the other hand, I do get rid of Tomo."
Yukari considered, then grunted. "It'd be worth it."
True.
"I bet your dad's worried about you, Chiyo-chan," Osaka murmured,
oblivious to the {suddent : sudden} burst of gunfire tearing
splinters out of the wall right above her head and Chiyo's
accompanying muffled scream of terror.
Sakaki leapt to her feet and dived for the guard's legs, tackling
him. With both down, the two began wrestling, and Sakaki found, to
her surprise and dismay, that she was clearly the stronger of the
two. Easily wrenching the gun from the guard's grasp, she reversed
it and swung the gun's butt against the side of the guard's head. He
slumped.
Why would she be dismayed or depressed? She's normally the most
athletic in the class and it doesn't seem to bother her.
Chiyo-chan shrugged. "I got to try one once when my folks took me to
Romania. Oh, Yomi, wait! That's the wrong knot to use there. Let
me show you." Chiyo squatted down next to Yomi and retied the last
knot on their former captor's bonds.
And redoubled the knots on Tomo.
"Actually, Tomo's using an old trick that's supposed to work pretty
well," Chiyo-chan said, leading the way to the right. "It's called
'The Nailer', and involves a woman operative entering a room topless.
For some reason, this freezes male enemies for a few seconds."
I'm certainly not going to try to explain that to her.
From inside, they heard a stern, slightly {staticky : staticy} voice
lecture someone. "You have failed me, Number Two! You know my
standing orders for anyone related to Doctor Mihama! You should have
gone to Plan B the moment you knew you had the girl in your
possession!"
Chiyo-chan proceeded to show Kaorin and Osaka how to do this, and the
three girls started {disarmimg : disarming} all of the bombs strapped
to the pillars. When she'd finished her bombs, Chiyo-chan inspected
the one Kaorin was just finishing, complimenting her on her
technique. Kaorin, beaming, skipped off in search of Sakaki while
Chiyo-chan continued on to Osaka, who was still on her first bomb.
The next day, Miss Yukari finished taking {attendence : attendance}.
"So you're all here safely, even Tomo. Humph. So much for my
hopes," she muttered to herself. In a louder voice, she continued,
"Chiyo-chan, Sakaki-san, Yomi, Kagura-san, Osaka, and Kaorin-chan:
the Principal has asked me to inform you six that you will be
receiving official commendations for your level-headed actions
yesterday."
"Tomo, those markings on your face are in violation of the school
dress code. You'll have to stay after class for detention."
She should probably have put her shirt back on too.