--- Christopher Angel <c_j_angel@hotmail.com> wrote:
 

Quick note: If you want to read the previous chapters go to: 
http://www.yggdrasil.org/omg/index.html.

I recommend it, since I think I posted the last chapter in early
2000.

Yeah, it's been a while. Good to see you finishing it off.

*Good.  Now get up and prepare yourself...after all you might just
have to 
do some BUTT-KICKING FOR GOODNESS!*

Your conscience is Minsc? Now, that explains a lot!

He?...she? - look, I couldn't tell - stood up and pointed an
imperious 
finger at me. "We aren't finished here, Mortal! There will be a
reckoning!" 
the androgynous wonder cried, and disappeared in a puff of 
brimstone-flavored smoke.

Yes, people forget that early manga Mara was definitely androgynous.
Even these days she can dress in very short cutoff jeans and still
lose a sexiness contest to Sora in coveralls.

I entered the house in a decidedly bad humor, one that wasn't
helped by the 
fact that I discovered Urd and Belldandy BOTH comatose on the
floor.  "What 
the hoeck happened here?!"

hoeck => heck

Below me, I heard Keiichi and some girl talking.  I edged over to
where I 
could get a look without getting caught by Mara.  Somewhat good
looking, 
"hot" by general standards, too skinny for me.  I studies her face

studies => studied

Oh, I don't know, maybe because he's a decent guy and doesn't like
taking 
advantage of people?  What the hoeck is this?

hoeck => heck  

Heh.  At least Keiichi is still himself (sorta) even under a goofy
spell.  I 
peered over at Mara, who was focussing harder on the crystal ball.

focussing => focusing


An interesting adaptation of that chapter in the manga, and a good
story. I thought it ended fine. AMG is all about the relationships,
not the action, so it's fitting to end it at a major turning point in
the relationship rather than the action. That's my $.02, anyway.

Brian Welch


		
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