Wow, this one takes me way back, especially since the first fanfic I read
were this and OMGod?

I could only find one typo off the top of my head:

second before I decided it was likely Saykoko - Miss Queen Nekomi.  I had

Now, onto the story.  As an individual chapter, it was well-written,
entertaining, and we've started getting other viewpoints as well, and it
made me go back and reread the the whole fic from the beginning again.

In context of the rest of the fic, it doesn't jive with me as a finale. <_<

This felt more like a filler episode than anything else.  Yes, Chris has
finally verbally accepted that the Norns are his family; the thing is,
that didn't feel like the point behind the fic as a whole, despite that
being his wish.  I mean, the vibes of the sibling relationship were there
throughout most all of the chapters, anyway; the verbal admission felt
pretty anti-climactic as the ending of a series.

We're also left with a few billion extra plot points that aren't even
close to resolved.  We haven't seen Rachel and Ami since he left them for
God's Toy; we don't know how he dealt with returning to them and Japan, or
anything that's happened to them at all. (Which is pretty cruel,
considering the way Chapter 8 closed.) We find out about parts of Chris'
subconscious which I'm sure will be dealt with in DW5.

I'm sure there was a point to what I was saying, but I've lost it. 
Basically: Writing, good!  Chapter, good!  As end of story, not so hot.

And I'll repeat that I'm really curious as to how the whole Rachel/Ami
plotline gets settled, or at least I'd like to have seen it get touched
upon.  What can I say?  Love triangles/polygons are my golf.  Looking
forward to more!


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