On Thu, 7 Oct 2004 12:19:17 -0400
"DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

[Forward: This takes place at the second year summer beach festival, meaning
everyone but Kaorin is present. This will be a set of scenes around a common
theme, like Sex Education was.]

Shouldn't the setting be self-evident from the story? Or is this
an obsolete dogma I'm thinking here?

~Something Fishy~
[...]
"I told you Sushi was a good name," Tomo said in satisfaction.

This was enjoyable.

Good characterizations.

~Handling Palms~

Chiyo hurried to the front of the group. "I'll go first. I really want to
know my future."

This is so not Chiyo, I would think. My Chiyo would let others to have
their fortunes read first. Remember that Chiyo was the one to suggest
to visit Yomi when she fell with cold. Even the only one, if we do not
count Osaka's non-commital body language.

"It's for the effect. Same with the mist," the man explained. "Now sit down
and let me read your future."

Man, this is just like Zoltan's James Brown :-)

Xxxxxxxxx

I'm not quite sure why you needed to use these sub-sub-chapter breakers.
The story is well structured as is. I had no difficulty following.
One thing I noticed, the 'x' bars are all of different lengths.
But I cannot crack the code, if it's present in them.

~~Things Left Lying Around~~

This felt unsatisfying. Perhaps my sense of humour needs a tune-up.

attention to him and boldly said, "Voulez-vous coucher avec moi, ce soir."

Wait a second. I can swear I saw an Azu fic about it. In fact... it was
YOUR OWN FIC:
 http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1701762/1/
It even has the masculine-loking Nyamo. I almost forgot about that one.

~~Body Art~~
[...]
"But what if it was a cute tattoo? A really cute one of something like...
Necoconeco. Wouldn't that make the person cuter, especially if they were...
fierce-looking?"

O.M.G. A fierce Neco-coneco.

~~Airborne Supremacy

Sakaki appeared as though she was about to say something, but upon seeing
Chiyo's pleading look, remained silent.

Hmm...

Sakaki was sitting completely still, her hands gripping the safety bar so
hard her knuckles were turning white.

Oh, that's what it was. Good move, DB!

For some reason Chiyo couldn't fathom, Sakaki's grip tightened.

Post this to FF and you'll make Kamehameha swoon.

~~The Cards Say It All~~

"Let's all do it!" Tomo shouted.

Obviously, her Ryo is very far in her future at this point :-)

Tomo said, "So, you want to start making out or what?"
"Hell no!"

This was good, really.

[END FIC] Not much of a bang to end it on, but that's sort of the problem
with vignettes. They just end. Thanks for reading.

Well. Sakaki afraid of heights was a gem.

As for the taking own old fics wholesale and repackaging them, it's
completely all right. Gabliel Garcia Marcos did this quite a lot, and
won a Nobel.

Good work. IIRC, you said it would be your last Azumanga fic. If so,
we'll miss you in the Azu section.

-- Pete

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