Chapter 9 Revenge and Rebirth Part 1
YAAAYYYY!!!
"And it was only five years ago that HR discovered the connection between
those events," Jacob explained, using the abbreviation for Historical
Research section. Willard International Consulting also had a Human
Resources department. A commonality that caused more than some confusion.
"Eventually, they managed to convince Command that the risk warranted this
level of resources, and here we are."
That whole part about HR and HR seemed a little long winded and a little
more than unnecessary. Would consider revising. Maybe just having him say
out the name or just leave out the part with Human Recources. Unless your
planning to us that later, then just ignore me.
" 'Fire or Ice,' " Jacob responded giving the title. He suppressing a
sigh. Stillwater was almost obsessed with that poem.
The poem is actually called 'Fire AND Ice' I believe.
***************
Kasumi approached the dojo. Her mug was in her left hand and her right
rested just above her waist. It was natural for her to keep her free arm at
the ready. The agent entered without knocking.
Her eyes narrowed at the sight of her sister being attacked by the
succubus' mate.
by 'her' succubus mate. Sounds better to me anyway.
"Good," Kasumi nodded. "Cute... spandex," the agent commented on the
garments the brood was wearing. They were in matching low-backed and
sleeveless unitards that went to mid-thigh. Akane's was deep blue and
white, Nariko's was black and violet, and Ranma's was dark purple and red.
"Lycra actually," Akane said, pointing out the minor difference in the
materials. She had
Feh, whatever, same diff.
"Nabiki," a familiar voice behind the teenager stated. Nabiki's body
jerked in surprise as she turned to see Kasumi standing behind her.
"You're going to be asked questions tomorrow. I trust you'll not divulge
anything sensitive?" the operations agent inquired in a friendly voice. A
slight smile was on her face.
Nabiki: Only if the price is right.
Kasumi: Then I guess I'll have no choice but to shoot you till you bleed and
die. Die and bleeed!
After he finished showering he shut off the water and asked for a towel.
Ranma expected one of his girls to toss one to him. Instead, Nariko slid
open the door and handed him a towel.
Nariko slid open the 'door' and handed him
If it's a curtain, keep with curtain. If it's a door, keep with door.
Ranma blinked at his daughter. He should have seen this coming. Grabbing
the towel he quickly wrapped it around his waist.
"Something wrong Mommy?" Nariko asked, with some confusion. How could she
have a problem with nudity? The brood slept in the nude and only wore
clothing for convenience.
"Oh, nothing" Ranma forced himself to either avert his gaze or keep it
centered on his girl's face.
"Mommy's bashful." Nariko smiled to her mate.
"Don't see why, Mother's very good looking in either form," Akane noted.
The blue-haired demon looked over the human form of her mother and
formulated a plan. Mother had sacrificed so much for them. It would be nice
if she could show her appreciation.
"It's just that I'm male, like this and you're... Never mind." Ranma
Umm... I think the comma is in the wrong place. Not sure though.
walked to the sink. He was actually pretty happy. The girls were joking
about his male form and not cowering and whining for their Mommy. That
was a good sign.
And yet after the shower finishes he is bashful and shy and doesn't want
to
see/be seen by them as a guy.
[that's because they couldn't see him in the shower stall behind the
curtain.
Later we are also taught that the demons
Have no greater attraction to males than females, and Ranma is well aware of
this, so I'm not sure this works for me. unfortunately I cant think of a
suggestion.
[It's not that. They're Ranma's kids they have no attraction to either
form.
Ranma's just more self conscious in demon form
Umm... not entirely positive but I think you meant 'human form'
"Umm, Red, I really don't need to see your butt in that much detail,"
Nabiki remarked dryly to Ranma as the brood mother walked into the kitchen.
Ramna: Aww, but it's so pretty. Isn't it girls?
Akane and Nariko: Yes mommy, scrumdiliuptious.
Ranma: Perfect, just like we rehearsed.
"Maybe we should eat lunch together," Usagi suggested. "We should get to
know each other more."
"We were planning on eating with Samantha and Naoko," Ranma said as the
group of girls made their way to the cafeteria.
Ranma: We were planning on eating Samantha and.... Damn, um, I mean, Eat
with them yes that's it! Eat WITH Samantha and Naoko. Hehehe.
"No," Akane said as she narrowed her eyes. "Remember what happened the
last time you hit on me?"
"You hit right back," Stetson replied, thinking he sounded much cooler
than he really did.
William: (thinking) Oh yeah, I'm cool, I'm cool... wait a minute. Oh man,
now she's gonna hit me! Damn.
Usagi looked at Ranma. There was something she to know - there was also
something Usagi should tell her. "Sunshine," Usagi said, using Ranma's
alias. "Can we talk... in private?" the blonde asked, her eyes looking at
the redhead.
Aren't those two the same thing? Her needing to know something and what
Usagi wanted to tell her?
"The dream predicted Nariko," Usagi pointed out as the walked along one of
the paths outside the school. The two girls were speaking in Japanese. It
was a welcome change for Usagi who while understandable, did not enjoy
English.
Suggest changing that line. Maybe, 'It was a welcome change for Usagi who
understandably, did not enjoy English.' or maybe, 'It was a welcome change
for Usagi who while could understand it, did not enjoy english.'
"Not quite," Usagi answered, glaring at the demon. "Before... before he
died, there was this evil queen. Long story short, she did something to
Mamoru that made our daughter start to fade in and out of existence. After
we beat her, Setsuna did that to make sure my daughter wouldn't disappear
again."
Now that would be an embarrasing conversation.
Setsuna: I need a sample of your seaman Mamaru.
Usagi and Mamaru: Wha wha what!?!?!?!
Usagi looked over Janet. "You know, if you put on a lab-coat, you'd be
pretty close to your mom."
Janet's face darkened. "No, I'm not."
Man, you'd think from that line she hated her foster mom. What's up with her
anyway? I hope she has a more important role than just being Ami's new best
friend. I'm sure she does.
"What'd you think of your first day of school?" Ranma asked as he
stirred his hot chocolate. He did not like coffee and the tea the cafe
served was awful.
"Could have been worse." Akane looked out one of the windows and
sighed. "I kinda wanted there to be more of an uproar. I mean, I come back
>from being missing and more people comment more about my dye job than they
do about me being a lesbian!"
Ranma: Well when I first met you I could tell right away that you were a
lesbian. It's not that much of a suprise honey.
Akane nearly purred at the return of her bond with her mother. As nice as
Mother's male form was, it was nothing compared to her true form. Akane
paused. No, Mother's human form is her true one. It's the one she was born
with.
You know, that first line reminded me of something. We haven't seen much of
the nekoken in the fic, or Ranma's fear of cat's for that matter. Do they
just not run into them, or is he cured when in his succubus form, much like
his bashfullness.
Once she was gone, Murdock returned to the bar and ordered a drink from
the waitress who was covering for the... indisposed bartender. This bar was
no Red Turtle, his preferred watering hole, but it would still get the job
done.
You know, now that I think about it, that scene does have some Burger
elements to it.
Ukyou paused and concentrated on her own powers. "Succubae?" the brunette
asked,
No! It's succubusses. Yeah, I is right cause I is smart!
"Nari-chan, breakfast's ready," Ranma said after entering the dining room.
Ranma: Come get your people!
Nariko: Yay, my favorite! Human hearts!
Nariko paused. She looked down at her dairy. "It helps me keep track of...
things." Nariko sighed. It was hard for her to articulate her point. Even
as a human, she had never been that mentally agile. That was why she had
gotten the diary.
Nice way of saying ain't right in the head.
Ryoga looked back to check that Ukyou had a clear path to support him.
"You know what to do."
Ukyo: Kill anything that moves, steal anything that doesn't.
Ryouga: Got that right.
Alright fine no more comments, they're just plain stupid. Anyway, I didn't
really see anything else that hadn't been covered.
Truk
Who also holds with those who favor fire.
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