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From: ffml-bounce@anifics.com [mailto:ffml-bounce@anifics.com] On Behalf
Of Raye Johnsen
Sent: Tuesday, August 31, 2004 2:34 AM
To: ffml@anifics.com; rayeml@topica.com
Subject: [FFML] [Fic][Naruto] Harmonia, part 1


Harmonia

Author's Notes:
	1. The 'no marriage before thirty' law is not
canonical, but rather my way of accounting for the
fact that there are no young married couples floating
around Konoha.
	2. I have done my best to translate the Japanese
honourifics appropriately, but there is no really good
way to translate either '-chan' (because the English
equivalent(s) are either too intimate or too
condescending to cover all the usages) or '-kun'
(because it can mean either a person of equal rank, or
an extremely high-ranked person, higher than '-sama').
 Thus I have left them alone.
	3. I know Hinata is a lot bolder here than she is in
the canon series.  This story is set ten years after
the manga, though, and I think Hinata will gain
confidence as she gets older and grows up, especially
as she now has Naruto on her side.  I've tried to show
that she's still very polite and diffident with people
she sees as equals and superiors, but that she's
confident in her ability to do things she knows how to
do -- such as teaching a genin team.

Nice start - I loved the little details, like Naruto still being basically
an overgrown kid, and the "any decade now" quip. Is this a divergence, or
just a hypothetical continuation? After all, there was already a situation
in the Manga where Sakura held off a far superior opponent (the Sound-nin,
after Orochimaru's first appearance).

You're right that the absence of young married couples is conspicuous, but I
think the explanation for it (if there is one aside from the Mangaka just
forgetting about it) is more along the lines of lack of people in that same
age bracket. 

Anyway, this looks like a good story - continue it soonest!

SP



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