Angus MacSpon wrote:

"We were just maneuvering your bottom around so we could find the best

spot

to pry you loose," Kagura assured her.

This part really feels like a set-up without a punch-line ... did they, or
didn't they?

They did. That was what was up with the mischevious grin Kagura had and what
was fondling Tomo's bottom.

 And _what_, exactly?

They doodled on her backside and drew pictures. Actually, if Tomo did come
across one, she'd probably make the most fun of the picture until she
learned she was in it.

  Etc.  It's worth a grin as it is, but

it really feels like it's missing the pay-off.

Kagura hid her eyes from the sight. She wanted to see Osaka's parents,

but

not like that. Behind her hands, she heard the sounds of a woman grunting
and groaning. Kagura found herself overwhelmed.

At least she couldn't hear Osaka's father, seductively murmuring
"Choo-choo ... choo-choo ..."

Yes. Thankfully. Unfortunately, you've now burned that image in my mine. >_<

"We should all meet at my house next!" Tomo insisted. "I can show you the
dungeon my dad made. It's so we can hide any hideously deformed family
members we have away from society. Not that we have any hideously

deformed

family members, just a bow-legged uncle. But if we do manage to get some,
we're prepared."

And the scary thing is, with Tomo, this might just be true.

Yes, all things are possible with Tomo. That's why she makes such a great
plot device. :)

All in all ... fun.  As usual.  :)

Thanks, and glad you enjoyed it.

DB Sommer

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