jedediah <jedediah@gotricounty.com> wrote:

	"So you're the one... who... oh... no..." As he rounded the
corner, all the bass disappeared from his voice at the sight
of the four metal tentacles and the man who weilded them.

wielded

	"I suppose you could call me that," Doctor Octopus said as

Um, call him what? "No"?

DOC OCK: You can call me Dr. No. I've always wanted to be a Bond
villain.

KEIICHI: No?

OCK: Yes.

KEIICHI: Dr. Yes?

OCK: No!

	"No, that would be an insult to guinea pigs everywhere,"
Doctor Octopus snapped. "I still need time to set up the
equipment, and you do need to sober up you worthless drunk.

up, you
("you worthless drunk" is indicating who is spoken to, so it needs to be
set off by a comma.)

	Akemi Moroboshi stumbled into the living room, dangling a

So Ataru married Akemi from Maison Ikkoku? ^_^;;;;

	"So, how does Miku fit into this. She's his neice, right?"

niece,
(look for this elsewhere)

Always glad to see more of this series, and this was a good action
chapter. Though I tend to wonder why the usual gang didn't do more.
Ranma certainly isn't going to limit himself to just keeping innocents
away, and some of the others could've gotten into it as well; Hinako's
energy transfer could've done interesting things to ol' Scorp.

Gos seems to have lost his taste for Spidey-style repartee in this
chapter. Is this intentional?

Looking forward to reading more when you get the chance....


Gary Kleppe
http://www.garykleppe.org/comics.html

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