----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Mark Shurtleff" <gaijin@sfcmd.com>
To: "David Taylor" <lumlydwt@msn.com>
Cc: "Fan Fiction ML" <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Thursday, July 08, 2004 4:27 PM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma/SM] Relatively Absent: Chapter 10


<SNIP>

Anyway one problem I'm having is the treatment of the Tendos by the

police

I'm fully aware of the difference between the American and Japanese
police, (I was in the US Navy
and spent a lot of time in Yokosuka and Sasebo), but my point is if the
police finally took action at
the  Emperor's "request" they would be very careful how they went about

it

with everything fully documented
and demonstratively "above board".
Perhaps a change so that the  "body cavity searches" took place in a
Police Station and fully video taped with multiple witnesses...
still within the letter of the law but extremely humiliating

I did those scenes with malice aforethought. Chapter 10 fills the reader

in

a bit more on just which unit the good lieutenant belongs to ("OCU").

Also note, the fact that the police did *NOT* tread lightly on the Tendos
should be a BIG clue that something went seriously wrong *somewhere* along
the chain.  The JNID agents' conversation outside Ucchan's in ch9 was
certainly a strong indication of this.

Ok Mark... give ya the benefit of doubt for now.  Let's see where you're
taking this.

J


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