Thanks for C&C - a few clarifications and notes on it too.

David Johnston wrote:
<multiple snips for bandwith ahead>

       Pulling on her Senshi uniform was a slow process this morning, delayed
by winces and stifled whimpers as pale white and gold Senshi armor caught on the
many bright red scars that laced her body. They were more still healing wounds
that scars, really, not yet repaired even after half a night's sleep in her
battle form.

[I take it they aren't wearing the figure-skating costumes?]

Even those uniforms are Armor, no matter how gaudy they look. A close 
look at the manga art makes it pretty obvious, as do certain bits of 
animation.
In this case, Venus wearing a slightly more form covering revision of 
one of  her old Sailor V costumes (mainly because it has a longer skirt. 
And sleeves) in her Sailor Venus colors.

       She supposed she would have to dig through father's Journals to at least
try to learn what this portended.

[Father's journals]
[And I have difficulty believing that Tendo never mentioned the name Genma
although he obviously didn't mention their agreement or Ranma.  She should
probably recognise the name but still not know what such a terse note
portends]

No, actually, this is streight from the Ranma Manga. The three Tendo 
daughters had never heard of Genma or Ranma before Soun received the card.
They are naturally quite put out about it in source :)

       Perhaps either father or son could have made such a leap across an open
alleyway. Neither, however, would care to do it while ten stories up -the fall
might not kill them, but it would not leave them unmarked either.

[Bah!  Nonsense.  They could easily make such a jump with no real chance
of falling.]

Not at this point in their lives, they couldn't.   While Fannon would 
have you beleive so, neither Ranma nor Genma is Superman.
Also note that this is Manga based and very serious. Do not expect the 
slapstick phyisics found in the Ranma Anime to be in effect.

     The person who was not human had been too slow; A sharp rap of the
short swords's sheath underneath it's gun hand slapped the submachinegun
upwards, directing the slugs into the brickwork behind him.

[I don't think Tatewaki would class them as people.]
 

The Kuno you know might not. The one you've just met does. There are 
reasons for this -
other than the Arm and eye he no longer has.
They aren't particularily nice reasons, however, so you can rest your 
mind of the fear of Tatewaki being PC.

 Genma didn't notice it pointing at him at all before the untraditional
girl made the thing disappear, and that made Ranma even more uneasy than

[Frankly I think you are under-rating Genma.  For all of his gutless
self indulgent folly, he's survived the consequences of his mistakes
for a long time and he still knows things Ranma doesn't know.  If 
Ranma spotted the gun, I think Genma would have as well.  Although
I suppose he might pretend not to have.  After all, he's been 
surviving the consequences of his mistakes for a long time.]

No...in this case, I have Genma spot on.  However, there are as yet 
unrevealed facts that make this unclear.
I my actually make it more blatent that he doesn't, actually, or more 
specfically, that Ranma does.

     Love, after all, was her element.   Fickle, difficult to use as a
weapon - in truth, her power within her element rivaled Saturn's, but her

[Of course the real Sailor Venus has metal as her element.  It sounds
a bit as if this one's a combination of Venus and Moon]

Actually, no. The real Sailor Venus has love as her element. The creator 
of BSSM is quite consistant on that point.
Most of Venus's later attacks are pure emotion (Specifically Love) 
attacks as are several of her early manga attacks.
Metal being Venus's element is a Fannon invention that I have only seen 
floating around in the last few years.
Still, if people keep telling me she's like a combination of Venus and 
Moon I may do something dire. c.c
Concidering that Venus was the prototype and all :)

       "Four Years ago. All of what you wish to know began four years ago."

[years]

[So Ranma stayed in China three years longer?]

Ah, a descerning individual.
No, but Ranma is just getting to Tokyo.
Odd, isn't it?
:)

"As our father, he would not loose.  No mortal, with only the Art, can slay a
demon and survive the slaying. I was not there to watch, so I cannot tell you

[lose]

[And, nonsense!  Dweebazoid Kuno survived killing one.]

Well, actually, no, he didn't.  He survived attacking one.
I've never said Kuno killed the beast he lost an arm and an eye too, 
after all :)
Still, this should be 'Demon Lord'. That will also be fixed.

Gamlain
Transuniversal Lunatic
gamlain@airmail.net


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