--- elisteran <elisteran@hotmail.com> wrote:

Adrian Tymes <wingcat@pacbell.net> writes:

Unobserved, an elderly man shorter than either
teenager eavesdropped on their conversation.  He

could

have sworn kids, especially girls, were not so

open

about the topic; to discover otherwise sent joy
tingling down his spine.

Is that really the part that was tingling? 

The tingle passed through his spine.  Where it wound
up, well...

For a moment, he lost track of who was defending

which

position, but it mattered not.  In his opinion,

the

discussion itself helped ensure Japan remained the
best country to live in, as reflected in his own
frequent measurements of one particular statistic.
Not that he often read foreign works unless in

foreign

countries.

This last paragraph wandered away into
incomprehensibility, it seems
to me. Was the foreign works a directed comment in
particular? I think
it'd work better if you just drop the last sentence.

I was trying to tie it into the comment that spawned
it.  But on review, I think you're right; this one
did not work too well.

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