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Fr�n: ffml-bounce@anifics.com [mailto:ffml-bounce@anifics.com] F�r Bob
Schroeck
Skickat: den 28 maj 2004 00:20
Till: Mark Shurtleff
Kopia: Chris Nasipak; ffml@anifics.com
�mne: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma/SM] Relatively Absent: Chapter 9


Mark Shurtleff wrote:

There's no vengeance fic'ing involved here. There also isn't any
character bashing.

I didn't say there was.  What I tried to say was that to the careless
reader it might look that way.  Knowing how you write, after reading
so much of your stuff, and knowing how *I* write, I can only assume
that it's a set-up for a later payoff -- probably more than one.
Which you have confirmed in the next sentence.  That's all I need to
know -- and I didn't even need to know that.  Unlike some readers, I
don't need to have my hand held through the confusing or dark bits of
a plot.  <grin>

intervene.  The timing is... suspicious.

Heh - y'think? :p

<chuckle>  I'm just waiting to see what Ranma does when the Emperor
tells him the Tendo "situation" has been "handled".  And when he
finds out exactly how it was "handled"...

I see much application of a peculiar key-shaped clue stick in the near
future of this fic. Might I even have the pleasure of watching their
Imperial Majesties cower a little once Our Hero finds out just what exactly
went on?

I liked the idea of the cops being asked to formally apologize the old
fashioned way. Might the "interregnum" title hint at higher-ups doing the
same? It sort of hints at there being a "headless" phase, doesn't it?

More of the "Misadventures of Tsukino Usagi and her merry Schoolgirls",
please. Especially if we can get some more insight into the powers behind
this whole show (the Crystal and the Glaive).

Like several people have commented already, this story, while already on
chapter nine, is moving very, very slowly chronologically. These last two
chapters cover one morning and afternoon, the three before that cover a day
between them. While I love the detail and all the chaos in the surroundings,
I'd really like to see the pace pick up a little. (The last book I read that
was paced this slowly was A Crown Of Swords by Robert Jordan, which managed
nine days over 6-700 pages. This is perhaps even slower, as I don't have a
wordcount on hand for either.) Also, bear in mind that some of the
characterization objections may be from not having a recent memory of
previous chapters. I remember there being a big stink on that either here or
on Delphi regarding a previous chapter.

Oh and everybody, I know I harp on this ceaselessly, but please trim your
headers a little? I had to cut out five or so extra addresses this time. You
don't *need* to reply to both the list and private mail, that's redundant,
and clutters up mailboxes. Either or, people.


SP


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