Suddenly, Keitaro found himself the recipient of a huge
group-hug from the girls. He became acutely aware of the close contact
between them. Keitaro found himself closing his eyes and bushing once
more.

I think you mean 'blushing'.

Things were different now. Her sempai, Keitaro, had given her
a new perspective on life. He taught her <to> tackle the challenges of life
head-on.

Su made the necessary adjustments to turn her blender into
a weapon of mass destruction even as she heard the door to her room
slide open, the sound of rapid footsteps indicating that a chase was
going on. A chase! Right in her room! Such fun!

You know, that works on a visual level, somehow...  
SU: Beware... The BLENDER OF DOOM!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!

Keitaro frantically tried to get Motoko to listen to his
suggestion. "No, I'm totally serious! Seta-san gave me this incredible
glue that fixes _everything_. I use it to fix Seta-san's pottery, and
it works on metal too! You can't even see the seams! You know that van
of his? It keeps getting destroyed, then rebuilt. He uses the glue to
fix the van!"

Oh, so _that's_ how he keeps his insurance premiums so low. <nods>
Makes sense.

They woke me up too early, and I slept
late last night too. It was kinda annoying."

I thought she was _up_ late last night? 
This comes up later, in the scene in Seta's van.  Maybe 'went to
sleep late'?

Motoko's sister chuckled at her words. "My dear sister, this
is but one of many human forms that my husband can assume. His true
identity is that of Leonardo, a teenage mutant ninja turtle!"

<starts laughing> 

-----------------------

Very funny.  Nicely done and written.
Can't wait to see what you come up with next.

Dave Fox


"I can't take his money. I can't print my own money.
I have to work to -get- money. Why don't I just lie
down and DIE?"
Homer Simpson



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