on 5/21/04 6:52 AM, Chan Wei Lik at weimin@pl.jaring.my wrote:

Better than the previous attempt. I'm disturbed by how casual Hild is
about disposing of her minions, but not so much that I would ask you to
change those scenes.

Hild is a demon lord. She has to keep her minions in line with ample amounts
of violence. Besides, she didn't kill any of them, they'll get better in a
few years.

"I'm not dead!"

"You will be soon, you're burned to a crisp."

"But, I'm immortal."

"Oh, yeah, sucks doesn't it."
 

Should be 'her underling' or 'the underling.

Fixed and uploaded to FF.net and my website.

Burger


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