----- Original Message -----
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
To: "hkmiller" <hkmiller@theeddy.com>; <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Sunday, May 16, 2004 11:20 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Noir]The Peace of the Ten-Year-Olds

finally getting to this:

 hkmiller@theeddy.com wrote:

so they'd been forced to camp when Mireille proved too exhausted
to drive farther.  Kirika saw no sign that any human had visited
this small clearing in many years.  Mireille had her gun, Kirika
noted with relief,

Why? I'm sure Kirika could kill a few mesely gunmen with some tree bark or

a

blade of grass is she had to. :P

I don't know why I didn't think of this the first time I read.  In the first
episode, she takes on over a dozen armed men with nothing but her hands.

  "Idiot!  Don't you EVER do that to me again!  Kirika...
  I was so miserable with you gone.  I hated living.  Please,
  don't ever leave me again!  I need you!"

Ah ha, time for a lesbian lovefest.

Why not?  He's already given us Noir slapstick, Noir comic relief and Noir
fanservice.:)

Mireille and Kirika froze, horrified.  "NO!" they expostulated
in unison.

Kirika shouted? She doesn't shout when she gets shot. you should leave it

as

just Mirelle shouting.

She's been thrust into a situation that she has no previous experience in.
Namely, a fanclub.:)

"Damn it!  How did they get loose?  We can't afford to go back
and tie them up more securely; we're too close!"

Kirika: Shooting them in the kneecap will keep them in their place.

What makes this line scary?  As his prereader, I honestly believe he'd ask
your permission to PUT IT IN!:)


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