Going over this:

Process of Elimination: Recovery

It had taken nearly thirty long years to reach down through the
ice, and the cold to reach the core.  It had taken skill, and long
suffering, and technology

That's an odd mix.

The body of the other man, the primary focus of coming to this
place, was sitting, arms held across his chest, eyes closed, perfected
preserved from the extreme sudden cold that the body was subjected to.

His jet-black bodysuit had protected him from the worst of the ice, but

his face had been deeply lined by the

something missing here

Perhaps the cruelest of all, outside of the people who were there on
that dark day, was that no one outside

use 'outside' twice.

Some had argued against removing him from here,

drop 'from here'

*****

The ship landed with a quiet whoosh on the bare field near the
Crypt.  From here, four men, all middle aged,

middle-aged

She was interuptted by a glow near closed door.

something missing there.

This needed proofread at least one more time.

As Tsunami/Sasami left the room, Washuu walked up to the ice that
seperated her and Ranma, and for just a moment touched her forehead to
the ice.  A small flash, a memory perhaps, flashed for a moment before
her eyes.  Without another word, Washuu turned and walked out the door,

without looking back.

Hmm. Not really much to this. Reads more like a prologue, but not with much
bite to it. Too dry and static for me.

DB Sommer

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