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Very Slayers like.  However, something about the tense
seemed off, but I can't put my finger on it.

Gourry looked in over Lina�s shoulder. �I didn�t
think Anya was 
interested in girls. I wonder if this means no
grandchildren.� He got an 
elbow in the ribs for his trouble.

Good ole foot in mouth disease!

incredibly powerful. I�d better do something.� Lina
walked into the 
room. �Anya! Are you all right?� Lina and the

Perhaps "I'd better look into it" or "I'd better have
a closer look".

Now it was Lina�s turn to blanch. �What do you
expect me to say?� she 
stammered.

Perhaps "Huh?" or "Help how?" or....this section just
seems a bit akward.

Lina frowned. �I already know. And part of me wants
to do it. That 
presence filling that room in the presence of a

"The presence filling the room..."

Chaos, and extinguish the spirit of everything that
lives.�

spirits

but I�m afraid that you, young lady, and the
daughter of a Mazoku.�

are the daughter of a Mazoku

Anya put her hand on Titania�s shoulder. �I know you
don�t, Titania. You 
don�t have an evil heart.�

I'm sorry, but two things come to mind here....

1.  From Neon Exodus Evangelion...."Good or Evil, that
is a choice"

and 

2.  "Good, bad, doesn't matter....I'm the one with the
gun."  Evil Dead...LOL!

�Yes, he was.� Lina answered. �We had a bit of a
confrontation outside 
as we arrived.�

Lina probably would have called it a "conversation"

�From what I can sense, you could, if your power is
left unchecked, 
destroy the world all by yourself.�

Earlier Lina said enough power to destroy the town or
the barony...

Xellos smiled. �Yes! Anger! Rage! Grief! Your
emotions are such a treat, 
Titania! Now focus them into power! Strike me down
if you can!�

I'm having serious Star Wars flashbacks here....LOL! 
Not in a bad way though!  

Xellos sent a bolt of shimmering black energy
between Titania and Anya, 
blasting them apart. �Didn�t anyone ever tell you
children should be 
seen and not heard?� 

I keep trying to tell my daughter the same thing!

to meet her daughter. A real firebrand, that one.
She is going to be 
every so much fun to play with!�

ever so much

A good chapter.  I'm looking forward to the next ones.
 I'll read and C and C those after the weekend.



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