For all those who replied; thank you. It's definately appreciated.
Now, for the onlist replies;
Adrian Thymes: I noticed the character mistakes too. I'll make sure to keep it as a text file *out* of Word so the formatting problems won't return. But I can't guarantee that since I use Word primarily. If there's any shareware/freeware word processors out there than I use, I'm more than willing to try them.
DB Sommer:
<Lain's a rare one to pop up here. Of course, I didn't really care for the series, so...>
*shrugs* No biggie. I can also understand why a lot of people would have a hard time with it since it doesn't exactly follow normal storytelling conventions... or at least, that's how I see it.
chance to say goodbye. And now, wherever Alice was, Lain >>was not.
Interesting way of putting it.
I thought so too. That's why I used it.
Walking through what looked like a gate, she strolled
through a park that still remained as it was, despite her
condition. Lain liked parks. Parks always seemed to calm >>her troubled mind, even in this frame of perspective.
'frame of perspective' seems a bit off, though. Might want
to reword it.
Hmm, would 'point of view' work better, you think?
Whenever she thought of them they
them, they (I think)
Yes, you're right. I'll be sure to fix that.
also seemed to appear... or did she appear in one? It
mattered little.
It might matter to the park. :)
Heh. It never occured to me that parks have feelings too. :p
Sitting on a rock, she watched existence pass by in an
instant. Everything passed by and passed on. None would
notice her. It was nothing knew. Was it?
?Not really.?
Odd characters here
I'm not sure if it's my email client or the coding from Word (or both) that's making those characters appear where there should be quotation marks.
?What is this place??
?It is what it is. And it is where we are.?
She blinked at his answer
Don't know why. She's used to the duality. :)
Or is she? :p
The man turned towards her and said in a manner of a
father gently chiding his offspring. ?You didn?t listen. >>I said: No one is ever really forgotten.?
Man: I think. If some are forgotten, I don't remember. I
guess I forgot them.
It may be just me, but that sounds like something Terry Pratchett would have said. (Side note: I just finished 'Mort' recently and I loved it.)
She sat on the rock beside him and looked into the same
place he did, digesting his words carefully. If no one is
forgotten, she wondered, and then
think you can drop 'and'
Will do.
She noticed a small smile tugging at the corners of his
lips when he answered, ?A name that I nearly forgot a long >>time ago. Among my people, I was named
Wade. It's a good name, and easy to pronounce.
Heh. bet Ten Oh wishes he had a name like that every once it a while.
I wish I had a basic explanation as to what the heck
happened, but I'm still sorting out the details.
It happens. Sometimes you just have to go with the flow.
*nods* And who knows, maybe if I keep it up, I'll eventually write something good. :)
As for Lain?s companion, I would doubt that Ten Oh would
act like Kujaku, but since this would take place a long
time after the end of RG Veda,
Only saw a bit of that, and don't remember it anymore. I'll >have to rewatch it someday. Once I'm finished with my
current anime
I remember seeing the anime, but most of my source material came from the manga since I own it. (Thank heaven for web translations.)
Thanks for sharing.
DB Sommer
You're welcome and thanks for reviewing.
Finally; Zorknot.
Nice fic. Really captured the tone of Lain. And for the second matrix movie for that matter.
<Which actually kinda confuses me since I've not yet seen the second, nor third Matrix movie. I may eventually, but it'll probably be when I'm so bored I'd be willing to waste four hours of my life in the Wachowskian philosophical quagmire.>
Unfortunately the drawn out philosophical discussions were the worst part of both. You captured that very well, but I think it's one of those things you should just set free:-)
<Well, I was hoping to just present an open ended story that continued from the end of Lain. Truth be told, I felt the anime story was complete to the point where fanfics like this were not neccesary. But I went ahead and wrote it anyway. :)>
I wonder now though, why no one has done a Lain/Matrix
crossover? Maybe they have and I haven't seen it?
<Actually, someone has. The story was called Synthesis and from what I could tell, it starts quite a while after the end of the first movie. It's not complete and it hasn't been updated in quite a while. I emailed the author a while back and from what I remember, the author was having the usual real life interference. Oh well.
On another note, I just may brave the other two movies and endure the pain for an fanfic idea. Because I liked 'Synthesis' and figure that Lain could take on the +100 Smiths in her own way, I've been tempted to give it a shot too, but, like many others, it'll be a while.>
Anyway DB pretty much covered all my other problems
with the fic. I'll just say kudos on writing a Lain
fic that stayed true to the original so well and leave
it at that.
<Thanks. :) I really appreciate C&C like this.>
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