Angus MacSpon wrote:

What follows ... is a complete episode from the third season of "Queen
Serenity and her Senshi."  It's in script format because, well, that
really seemed the most appropriate in this case.  And if anything, it's
more horrific than I expected.  Or, to put it another way, writing it
was a blast.  :)
 

Reading it was too!

    A moment later, with another scream of exhilaration, Princess Kakyu
    follows Usagi.  She is seven years old, with vivid green hair and a
    single odango and long pony-tail at the back of her head.

    Another instant, and the two are followed by Prince Elios on a third
    hover-board.  He is also seven, with bright blond hair in a mullet.
 

Kakyu and Elios, huh? And in such... interesting... roles.

    Sailor Jupiter is standing over a hot stove, delicately adding a
    pinch of spice to something purple in a pot.

Europan spice slugs?

            But you know Captain Taiki told us we're not
 

And the Starlights as officers in Serenity's military. You might
want to describe their uniforms ;)

    The servant bows and departs.  As she reaches the door, it opens and
    Captain Yaten enters.  The servant bobs her head as he passes.  He
    is a tall, massively-muscled bald man with a dark scar running down
    his face.  He wears a heavy leather uniform.  

Yaten? The most bishonen of the Starlights has this description?
;) and I think you want... "a heavy leather uniform consisting of 
hot-pants and a halter-top."

    As she moves off, ZOOM IN on the face of the portrait.  We see that
    one of Ryoko's eyes has been replaced by a camera that swivels to
    follow Sailor Mercury.
 

But of course...

                            ELIOS AND KAKYU
                    (together)
            STAR TWINS POWER ... MAKE-UP!

32  TRANSFORMATION SEQUENCE -- STOCK SHOT
    Stock transformation sequence.  A vortex of energy surrounds the
    two, sweeping them up and merging them together, then fading away to
    reveal the slender, androgynous form of Sailor Asteroid.
 

Gag! This really is HORRIBLE! (congratulations, I suppose, on capturing 
the spirit of
American Saturday morning cartoons so precisely).

    mecha standing silently within.  Sailor Asteroid runs to the Ceres,
    a sleek, electric pink unit.  The front plastron slides open as
    Asteroid approaches, and s/he climbs in.  As the plastron closes
    again, Ceres' eyes begin to glow.

                            SAILOR ASTEROID
            CereCere ... launch!
 

I didn't catch any references to the other four Amazon sisters in this 
story; did you
make any?

    She tip-toes across to the hangar in a very exaggerated I'm-being-
    sneaky way.  Inside, she heads for the Star Pegasus, a towering,
    vaguely horse-shaped mecha.

Of course; what ELSE would Chibi-Usa's private spacecraft look like? 
(rolls eyes)

            Yes.  My computer scans at Rhea Base showed some
            kind of negative energy that I've never seen
            before.  Our enemy may not come from this solar
            system ... or even this universe.
 

(gasps) It must be the Negaverse!

                            SHADOW VOICE
            Step into my parlour ... said the spider to the
            fly.
 

Overwritten JUST like a Saturday morning cartoon, so that children won't 
miss the
reference.

            And now, Sailor Mercury ... you will give me the
            security codes to unlock the ginzuishou ... or I
            will destroy the twins before your very eyes.
 

LOL! "security codes" for the ginzuishou!

    One of the bridge bunnies speaks up.  She is, of course, young,
    cute and perky.
 

Of course! Can't have our bridge bunnies being anything else, now can we?

    The shadow becomes clear at last.  A lean, male face wearing tinted
    glasses that reflect the light.  He has a sharp beard, and his face
    is set in a sadistic smirk.

                            SHADOW
            I am Gendo ... the Death Phantom.
 

LOL! "The most evil genius in all of anime!"

    The four Vipers loop around the Endymion.  As they do, the Endymion
    begins to reconfigure itself.  With whines of power and solid
    metallic clunking sounds, the front section tilts up, the rear
    section separating and reshaping itself.  One by one, the Vipers
    slot themselves into place in the transforming ship.

                            SAILOR VENUS
            Sailor Venus -- lock!

                            SAILOR JUPITER
            Sailor Jupiter -- lock!

                            SAILOR MERCURY
            Sailor Mercury -- lock!

                            SAILOR MARS
            Sailor Mars -- lock!

                            ALL FOUR
                    (together)
            Senshi Power!

    The Endymion, and the docked vipers, have become a giant humanoid
    figure -- yes, a female one -- floating in space.
 

You know, even after all that you've already had in this episode, I 
still wasn't prepared
for this, the giant mecha assembly scene. You stoop so low!

    As the glare fades, we catch a brief glimpse of something small and
    dark, darting away from the destruction.
 

Naturally, if this is only episode 5! Gendo can't die until the end of 
the season!

Nice job. Despite its lightness, this obviously took some time and effort
to write. Thanks for writing and sharing (though I'm really looking for the
next chapter of SM4200, natch!)




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