Hmmm...  Change of tone here.  That makes for interesting reading, but, 
to be
honest, my first reaction is that parts of this are overwritten, and 
could benefit
from some editing down.  I found the fight with Tarou on the ship a bit 
tedious,
and the never-ending pain at the end with Kachiko to be likewise.

DB Sommer wrote:

"Yes, alcohol makes everything better," Kachiko slurred slightly as she
drained her glass for the sixth time in a half hour and set it back down on
the table.
 

Heh.  Six glasses of wine in half-an-hour?

"That's nice to know," Ranma said weakly, hoping the food would arrive soon
 

and, better yet, without food to accompany.  No wonder Kachi's hammered.

restroom. A dozen different disaster scenarios ran through his mind, from
her passing out to being abducted.

"Nah, I'm being silly," Ranma decided as he looked over his shoulder just in
time to see Tarou head through the swinging doors to the kitchen with
Kachiko slung over his shoulder.
 

Heh.  Had me fooled here; I thought Ranma would sit here for hours 
before he began looking.


Towards the end, it began to seem like you're really going to send Kachi 
back,
whereas the earlier parts seemed like you might go in the direction of 
having Ranma
break up with Akane and really marry Kachi, permanently exiled from her 
own time.
So you're still got me curious about where this is going.



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