Suggested changes: {before : after}
On 03/09/2004 02:30 AM, Bill Heineman said:
Miss Kino was pleased that her first culinary student was eager to
learn how to prepare an edible meal. The campsite she had picked to
practice was many kilometers away from civilization. It was the ideal
spot Makoto thought. If Akane somehow set the meal on fire, the
damage would be controllable and the city wouldn't be placed in
danger. It took three days for the tall girl to clean and repair her
kitchen in the aftermath of Akane's last cooking lesson. Going down
her mental checklist, she got to work. "Let me check the barbecue."
Akane's -- ah -- power as a cook must have increased a lot if Makoto is
concerned about how much damage the result can do to the city.
The short haired girl {nodded : shook} her head. "I guess it's
nothing." She lowered her arms while still fixated on the horizon,
she accidentally knocked over a salt shaker off the table. It hit the
hard ground and broke in two. Attracted to the noise, the girl
whimpered another apology. "I'm so sorry! I hope that wasn't
expensive." She bent down to pick up the pieces.
Crying tears of joy and renewed hope, Io hugged Jupiter. "You did
it!" Jupiter emitted a squeak before falling {unconcious :
unconscious}.
Io and Jupiter listened on the encrypted radio broadcast of their
role in the battle plan. Their job was actually simple. On a specific
date and time, they were to engage a massive force and keep it busy.
Connor was to carry out other operations and if successful, {Skynet
: SkyNet} would be no more. He would be able to prevent his own
death.
Jupiter glanced at the time. They had about ten minutes before
transmission. "He has to. This is a war, remember. We don't know if
the radio is bugged or if {Skynet : SkyNet} cracked the encryption."
"{Skynet : SkyNet}!" They shouted together.
Io tried to come up with the answers, but Jupiter beat her to the
punch. "Don't you get it? It wasn't John at all! We're winning and
{Skynet : SkyNet} is going to go back in time to fix things in it's
favor."
"Don't you see? If {Skynet : SkyNet} thought that time couldn't be
changed, why build a time machine in the first place?"
Soon the speaker came back on, "Message sent. {Reception : Receipt}
acknowledged."
If Io's call sign is Fairy Godmother, I wonder what Jupiter's is.
The only sound was Jupiter pressing keys. "Oh, that was diplomatic.
Why don't you just tell {Skynet : SkyNet} our plans while you're at
it."
{The : They} jumped out and cast their magic attacks. Both spells hit
home and two more battle tanks erupted in spark and flames.
Instantly, all of the flyer's engines shut off and they all fell to
the ground at the same time. Io threw a fireball, blasting another
tank into bits.
An excited voice came on the line. "Thank god you're there! We won!!
Base One reports that {Skynet : SkyNet} is destroyed{, : .} The machines
have stopped. We've got confirmation everywhere. Do you copy?"
Author's Notes: Please review my story. It makes me feel oh so happy
and keeps me writing chapters of fan fiction.
By your command... Oops, wrong fica.