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From: "Gary Kleppe" <gary@garykleppe.org>

It's not a real word. And "wobbly" isn't really meant to be used in

that

grammatical context. Try "woozily" perhaps?

"Wobbly" is an adjective. "Wobbily" was my attempt to make it into an
adverb. If this is wrong (which it may well be) then you (Arthur, not
Lurker) should probably just rephrase it so you don't need to use it as
an adverb.

I can understand that. But English (especially American English) is not
something totally inflexible either. It may hurt some purists reading it,
but I think I'll go with the word "wobbily".

Yes, but their father needs to be slightly functional for them *and*
Kasumi.

Since when? The girls very rarely actually NEED Soun for ANYTHING.

They certainly don't seem to need him in this story. If they do, then
show us why they do.

Kasumi is not yet and adult and both Akane and Nabiki are both younger
too.

And people used to think making Kasumi the Lord God Almighty was

weird...

Weird isn't necessarily bad, though. It really depends on what you do
with it. If you can tell a compelling story featuring Super-Kasumi, then
go for it. But it's not there yet, because we don't know why giving her
these powers is going to matter in the story.

All in all? I'm not really going to be writing directly about Kasumi that
much, actually.

In general, going into backstory before you've shown us the actual story
is a bad idea. Explaining how Kasumi got her powers ought to wait until
we get an idea what the consequences of those powers are going to be.
Understanding what's at stake in the story and how she figures into it
will make us *want* to know how she got that way.

I don't have one single story that I'm planning to do for this shared
universe. I'm mostly focusing on the Ranma 1/2 side (mostly on
Ranma/Akane) but Kasumi is important, albeit peripherally.

And this automatically makes him lose every single nuance of

personality he

ever had?

Good ol' boys don't sober up THAT much for anything short of a funeral.
Hell, look at Bill Clinton when HE was in office.

(Hell, look at Dubya...)

No comment on that, as it's not really appropriate for this list. As far
as the Elvis in this story goes, the problem IMO isn't that he doesn't
act like the real-world Elvis. People can change, and fifty years is a
long time. The problem I had was that he wasn't showing much personality
of any sort. You've introduced President Elvis in your fic, but it
doesn't seem to make a difference, because President Elvis doesn't *do*
anything in your fic that President John Smith wouldn't have done.

I don't know that he had "no" personality, but he did react a lot
differently than I would have expected someone. And while he had a lot of
important things to do here, the story is directly about him, after all.

Gary Kleppe
http://www.garykleppe.org/comics.html

Arthur Hansen


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