Arthur Hansen wrote:

stood up wobbily.
(or)
stood up, wobbly.
   

My spell checker says "wobbily" is not a real word. Not that I believe it.

 

Wobbily isn't a correct spelling. It is either wobbly, or wabbly.
Wabble is a more archaic form of wobble.

"Iteeee..."
     

...bitsy spider?

You're rendering Japanese as English here, so be consistent. Don't throw
random Japanese words into dialog for no reason. It would be fair to use
Japanese if you were writing from the American agent's POV and he didn't
understand Japanese, but then you should do it consistently for all the
Japanese dialog in the scene (or just mention that they said something
and not tell what they said until it gets translated into a language he
understands).
   

Actually, that was to be a random collection of sounds that someone in
pain would say. Little spider? Didn't know that.

 

The itsy bitsy spider crawled up the water spout.

Ite is a Japanese sound used to express pain. You probably should
change it to the equivalent English term, ouch. That's what he was talking
about. Mixing Japanese terms into an English story is often confusing to
readers unfamiliar with Japanese. Seeing as this is a L & C xover, you'll
have some L & C fans reading who probably don't read many anime
stories and may not know what ite means.

"Yes, I am the master of the Tendo School of Anything Goes Martial
     

Arts."
 

The Secret Service Agent just blinked. He must have mistranslated that.
     

Huh? Why?
   

That was an inside joke about "Anything Goes" only being one of the
possible translations. There's also the Indescriminate Grappling.
 

Actually, the only translation is "indiscriminate grappling". However,
Viz discovered something between translating the manga, and dubbing
the anime: the average person does not have the slightest idea what
indiscriminate means (without distinction), so they changed that to
anything goes. It's not quite the same, but close enough. They also
realized that the only time the average person has heard the term
grappling is in a spy or pirate movie, so they changed that to martial
arts since the Ranma series concerns mostly martial artists.

I can see what you're talking about. This was more to tell a back-story
about Kasumi gaining super-powers.

 

As that, it does well. It'll be better overall once you get into the
story proper.


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