I'd just like to pitch in agreeing with everything Gary said about this, and
add one thing:

With the exception of lightning being used to transfer the superpowers,
absolutely NOTHING in this story feels even remotely like it "revolves
around" the Lois & Clark world. It feels a hell of a lot more like you
picked some arbitrary comic continuity--an alt-universe one at that--and
slapped the Tendou family into it. Rather sloppily, at that.

There's about a million ways a crossover like this could be written and not
suck. This was not one of them. It TRIED to be interesting, but between the
rather poor narrative style, characterisation issues, plot holes you could
steer the Titanic through...

Let's just say this'll be needing a heck of a lot of work before it
approaches being worth another glance.

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