Hey. 

First off this is a very interesting concept, having
Ranma characters in Roman times with Caesar and all
that.  And you really began this extremely well and I
was getting excited at how original it was...

And then you started with the religious stuff. 

Now, I understand that this is an alternate universe,
and so many things are different but whatever's
different needs to be introduced a little more. The
Romans were polytheists. Jews were a subjugated people
prone to getting stoned or crucified. Christians
didn't exist or were at best a fringe cult at the time
of Caesar. And even if it is theoretically possible
for a Japanese of that time to travel to Rome, learn
the language, and become a Jew or whatever, that
really needs to be explained. Adam is a hebrew name,
not a Roman one and Aitaka is a Japanese name and not
a hebrew one. Finally the whole conversation makes a
big ole juicy question mark start throbbing above my
head because Jews were too busy surviving persecution
to worry about pagans so far away. 

Maybe this is the HOLY Roman empire and this Caesar
that's mentioned isn't quite the Julius Caesar that I
expect? Maybe this man that rose from the grave is
Jesus and Adam is one of the initial few christians?
These things need to be revealed if that's the case.
Also how does Adam know anything about Masamune?

I'm having trouble making any sense out of it all I'm
afraid.

But still it is a very original idea and I commend you
on that, and maybe things will become clearer once the
Ranma characters get involved. You write very well. I
saw very few typos. Perhaps if you stayed more on
Aitaka in the beginning, went over how or why he's
taking this sword to Rome etc. it would make things
clearer.Hopefully you've found some part of this
useful.

May you be pleasantly surprised by something blue,

-W.B.R.


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