At 05:42 PM 1/30/2004 -0500, Roehl Sybing wrote:

You'll have to give me a specific suggestion, because I can't believe that
you are suggestion I stop using the rest of the English language once I
start including technical jargon in a scene.

In a whole scene, no.  But within any paragraph there must be consistency,
cousin of another literary mechanism called cadence.  Perhaps just get rid
of "bastion", "unconscious" as a noun is fine.

I'm sorry, the crack about "bastion" was a tongue-in-cheek thing.  My bad
sense of humor kicked in.

Heh.  *MY* sense of humor keeps whispering that consistency is the 
hobgoblin of little minds, but I'll be *damned* if I can remember where I 
first heard that old saw. <g>

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