Okay, so, even as a 'parody of bad lemons' CKK's offering was eminently
forgettable. I can't even claim to be a fan of ... er ... I'm not actually
sure if Kaydee is a he or a she ... but that's no reason to get personal
about it. After all, everyone starts out writing badly, and while most who
keep at it get better, it takes longer for some than others.
On the actual fic itself... I can see how it was intended to be a parody,
but there's not really enough oomph to carry it as such. In order to go out
the other side of badness and into humor, you have go beyond merely over
the top... include narration about poor voice acting, or have the
characters go into long bullet time justifications of how acing this way is
actually just a different way of interpreting their usual motivations,
overwrought purple prose like a romance novel about Ryoga's hair glistening
in the sun and making Ranma-chan feel all light-headed and weak in the
knees, or something. A wall is knocked down to reveal Happosai and Nodoka
at an announcer's table giving color commentary on the action. Just before
they can come (together, of course!) a herd of rampaging wildebeests crash
through and break them up, because *nothing* can ever be resolved in Ranma
1/2. Kasumi, Kodachi, and Mousse crash through the roof in a tangle of
ribbon, chains, various foodstuffs, and nothing else, too distracted to
notice. Fireworks and earthquakes go off at the moment of orgasm and do
massive property damage. SOMETHING to show, in the text, not the
disclaimer, that this is a farce, not an actual pathetically bad PWP lemon.
- CD