At 07:39 PM 1/13/2004 -0600, you wrote:

I've not read the previous 25 chapters, so I don't know how much good
these comments will do, but here goes nothing:

I reccomend you do indeed. It's really very good overall, though the 
run-ons are an endemic problem all through. One of the things that is not 
immediately obvious but important as to why all these American Navy types 
are hanging around is that it is set in 1945, instead of 2015, and there is 
no geofront or retractable city. Having so many women in important 
positions in 1945 and NOT having random male characters complain about that 
vigorously at any opportunity is a bit of a stretch, but I guess this 
alt-uni had a more relaxed view of women's rights all along, or something. 
Maybe the Magical Anime Force that allows breaking the square/cube law to 
let the evas exist warps everyone's minds? :?)

I'm hoping that a reason beyond 'I wanted to put him here' eventually turns 
up for adding Ranma to the mix, particularly for erasing his memories while 
doing so, as that seems to me do defeat the point. The prologue shows that 
they will eventually get back to 1990s Nerima, if not his meories of the 
place, and that the war against the mythos is probably underway there too, 
though it could be any nasty that set up the opening situation, we don't 
see it.

For that matter, I'd like a 'meanwhile back at the ranch' to see what the 
Wrecking Crew think now that Nabiki's vanished as well, and what was on the 
note Bell left in her place.

- CD, who spent the weekend reading SSM and didn't regret it 


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