Thanks to David and Gary for their detailed review.

Peach Toadstool is actually owned be Nintendo Co. Ltd. and created by
Shigero Miyamoto or one of his co-workers (Not sure). I put the so called
disclaimer in the 2nd chapter. But I may put the chapters together and put
the disclaimer at the end.

I'll read some fiction from pros in English and borrow some of my friends,
like Gary suggested, and then I'll rewrite the Fic.
Would Harry Potter be a good start (Have a good acces to it)
Or the fanfics with 'Good Grammar and Spelling' on the Penultimate Ranma 1/2
Fanfiction Index?

Writing in the past tence, that will be heavy. But I'll give my best.

I read the manga, but I should reread it. It's more than 2 years ago since I
read it last. My cliched parts may come from the other fanfics I constantly
read.
>From the anime-series I only saw a few episodes.

Yep, I'm from the German linguistic area, and even have in my own language
problem with the capitalisation. (Write nouns without, verbs with, ect)

I have to work on my grammar, spelling, and generall capitalization.

Greetings
Imoto

PS: My first postet fic to the FFML is still a success. I learned some
things and got good, constructive critics.


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