Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Fri, 26 Dec 2003 03:16:37 -0800 "Steve T."
<mixednutspress@earthlink.net> wrote:

Ami and Naru sat in Study Hall in an isolated corner of the library
watching as Usagi attempted to build a house of cards using only
{telekenisis : telekinesis}.

"Who?"  Jupiter asked.

"Sherlock Holmes," Sailor Moon said.

"No, Doctor Watson," Jupiter corrected.

"I..."  Sailor Moon trailed off and stared at the blank look on
Jupiter's face.  "You have got to be kidding..."

Actually, Holmes would have approved.  He believed in retaining nothing
that wasn't useful in his work.

Indeed, Ami was wearing her {civilan : civilian} clothes and was
staring at one of the benches that ringed the fountain.  As they
watched, Ami's head bowed, and her shoulders began to shake.  Soft
sobbing sounds reached their ears.

Spiderwoman darted forward, picking up the bench.  Again, she rippled
and there Sailor {Mecury : Mercury} stood.  She screamed, a wail of
grief and rage that seemed to be beyond the power of any human throat.
It was a scream that reached down into the soul, jerked things off the
wall and made them writhe.  Then, she hurled the bench at the fountain.

Jupiter frowned.  She was {vaugely : vaguely} aware that Ami was a
{looney : loony}, that is, was three different people in one body, but
beyond that, she had lost interest.

"He's alive, barely," Jupiter said, {examning : examining} the
rapist's body.  "I suppose that's a good thing."

The two teens {noded : nodded} and stood up.  "She went that way," one
of them said, pointing.

"We'll know soon enough," Kunzite said.  "Magnetite did say that the
Senshi would remember this night for a long time."

Hmmm.  To remember it, they'd have to survive.  I wouldn't think the
generals would consider that a good thing.

Goblin whipped around, the flying craft responding instantly.  Sitting
on the {chimmney : chimney} was a {senuous : sensuous} redhead in a
form-fitting dress and a black crown.  A crystal orb topped her scepter
and she was watching him with a smile on her face.

Both girls were thoroughly winded.  Sailor Moon had shed her leather
{trench : trenchcoat}, sending it back to wherever the senshi outfits
went and still sweat poured off of her.

Jupiter, who often spent half the day every day doing grueling physical
{excercise : exercise}, was hardly better.

Spiderwoman moved across the city.  {Vaugely : Vaguely}, she was aware
of voices in her head yelling at her, of her body protesting.

The big digital clock proclaimed it two in the morning, when Jupiter
finally collapsed on a scaffolding.  She and Sailor Moon were in the
{Entertainment : entertainment} district where the buildings on either
side of the main street were topped with {miniture : miniature}
skyscrapers of neon signs.  The scaffolding itself was for {maintence :
maintenance} workers.

Sailor Moon leaned against the sign, its heat soothing aching {muscels
: muscles}.  "If I ever get access to a time machine," she vowed.  "Or
even the chance to travel through time, the first thing I will do is go
kick Gendo's ass for putting Ami through this hell.  I don't care if
the fate of the cosmos hangs in the balance, I am going back in time to
kick that kid's ass."

"Fuck secrets," Jupiter said.  "I saw we drag Ami to a {psychciatrist :
psychiatrist}.  Let them put her back together."

"I'm not sure.  I was explaining my theory of time-traveling hippo and
penguin alien invaders from another planet in a {paralell: parallel}
dimension when he suddenly started screaming and then hurled himself
out the window.  Granted, I was talking very fast and doubletalking
while I was at it, so maybe he was little confused."

"Of course."  Jupiter voice was filled with {sarcasam : sarcasm}.
"Look," Ami's probably worked her angst out by now.  I say we go home."

"Look at you...hell, look at me.  We're both exhausted, probably beyond
{exhasusted : exhausted}.  It's two damn something in the fucking
morning, and the person we've been trying to find has made like Casper
and vanished."

"Do my ears {decieve : deceive} me?"  Sailor Moon asked.  "You're
really sorry?"

{Lonley : Lonely} days filled with nothing but school, games, and
shallow jocks who only cared about her because she getting them glory?
She was only too well aware that the only reason her freakish size was
ignored was because she was useful to the team and to the school.

Jupiter stared at Sailor Moon.  On one hand, she desperately wanted to
tell someone the secret she had kept locked away for nearly ten years.
On the other, the blonde next to her had proven she had no {qaulms :
qualms} about blackmail to get someone to do something.

"There were so many unknowns," Jupiter said.  "So many people so badly
mutilated that they were {unidentifible : unidentifiable}.  We lived
up north.  Isolated.  It was so easy to just vanish.  Head south.  Move
from school to school.  Learn how to get around the system."

"Here and there.  That's {usally : usually} when I moved on.  But here
in Tokyo . .
."

Jupiter sighed.  "After Okinawa, Ami and the other Miracles were
paraded all over the TV.  {Everytime : Every time} I turned on the TV,
there they were.  They made a big deal out of Ami.  Kept going on how
she had her Aunt and her grandparents."  Jupiter's eyes narrowed.
"Miraculous Ami Mizuno.  The last survivor.  Look at her.  She lost her
mother, but she has family.  People to love her."  Jupiter's voice was
flat.  Her nostrils flared.  She stared at something only she could
see, her fingers gripping the scaffolding hard enough to twist it.
"What did I have?  Nothing.  A big old empty house.  Not even a pet for
company.  Meanwhile, good old Ami was having all sorts of stuff just
given to her.  She had a family."  Tears began to streak down Jupiter's
cheeks.  "Family to tuck her in at night, to hold her during a
thunderstorm.  It wasn't fair.  Where was my family?  It just wasn't
fair."

The {Figure : figure} raised it's hand and the scaffolding began to
shake.

Driven by {adrenilene : adrenaline}, the two girls scrambled up the
metal bars of the scaffolding and onto the roof.

A {mettallic : metallic} thud behind them caused them to turn around.
Standing there was a twenty-foot tall {colussus : colossus} of metal
pipes and roof AC units.

Jupiter blinked for a moment at the question and then {noddded :
nodded} in understanding.  "You have to ask?" she asked in a
lighthearted tone, praying she was right."

--
Mac :})
Give a hobbit a fish and he eats fish for a day.
Give a hobbit a ring and he eats fish for an age.


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