Michael A Chase wrote:

Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Sat, 20 Dec 2003 12:23:26 -0500 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

Ranma rose to his feet, retreating toward the door to {: the} backyard.

"I just

remembered, I've got to fight Ryouga today. He gets lonely if he doesn't

get

angry with me at some point during the week. Bye." The moment he cleared

the

threshold, he bolted through the yard and over the wall.

He could always try to catch the CLAP, or some of them at least.  He

should

be okay as long as he remembers to wear his galoshes.  Did Nodoka ever get
him those rubbers she was considering?

Not yet.

Rather than act intimidated, Kachiko laughed. "If you're so hot and

bothered

about controlling who he should and shouldn't date, why don't you ask

him

out? Get him wrapped around your finger and you won't have to worry

about a

thing. I've done it to lots of guys. Like... like... umm, like...."

Like Yumi?

Except she was a girl. A crossdresser, but a girl.

"WHAT?!" Kachiko shrieked. "When I told her to ask him out on a date, I
didn't mean she should actually ask him out! She was supposed to get

angry

at the implication she likes him and stomp off, growling she doesn't

care

about him, like people like her always do! Actually asking him out goes
against everything Nabiki told me she's done before! I can't believe she
outmaneuvered me like this!"

The nerve of Akane, doing what she was told!  Though she didn't exactly

ask.

But Kachi doesn't know any better. And that was nervy of Akane, all right.
:)

Kasumi pondered that one. She began counting the number of places one at

a

time. "Well, there's the grocers. The fish market. Sometimes I go to Dr.
Tofu, he's a local doctor, and borrow books from him. Oh yes, and on the

far

side of town, there's this Museum of Cookware--"

What a wild-woman.

Kasumi smiled at her mother and the willingness she showed to go out of

her

way to help her oldest daughter, even if Kasumi was uncertain of what

she

needed 'saving' from.

Which is part of the point.

Yep.

"Stop that this instant!" Nodoka ordered, making the animal wince. "I'm
being serious. I need to know: am I boring and frumpy? And don't tell me
what I want to hear. I demand you answer honestly."

I don't know any man with an ounce of sense who'd want to answer that

honestly.

Even Genma is very nervous about answering.

But he caves in and answers it in the most diplomatic way possible.

taking her side when he should have been on the family's. But that was

Ranma. He didn't think things through and tended to be insensitive.

Akane

knew that from the beginning. It's just things would have gone much more
smoothly if he acted responsibly, thought about {is : his} treatment of

others, and

stated what he wanted.

Him acting all those ways at once seems a bit contradictory.

Well, it is a jumble of thought and not completely straight.

Akane looked on him in shock. Tearfully she cried out, "You don't have

to

make fun of me! All you had to do was say no!" She gave him a solid

right,

punching him clear of the table and onto the stage. Tears streaming from

her

eyes, she wailed in sorrow, not caring what anyone thought as she ran

off

deeper into the amusement park.

I think she took that remarkably well; no major property damage at all.

One way to look at it.

"No thanks. I don't think I need the lawsoof!" the man grunted someone

ran

past, knocking him aside as though he  wasn't there. The impact threw

him

into the handyman, who grasped out at anything to keep from falling

over.

I agree a lawsoof would be pretty serious.

Oui.

Ranma gave a loud "Eep!" in agreement.

Nearly as articulate as I've ever seen him.

And appropriate as well.

The light of realization dawned in Kachiko's eyes, though the light was

dim

{in relation : due} to the amount of alcohol she had consumed. "In that

case, gimme

one."

He had placed a {shot : tall} glass in front of Kachiko when Kasumi
staggered toward the bar, nearly stumbling into it.

According to the recipes I saw, you serve a Harvey Walbanger in a
collins glass over ice.

am changing the drink.

"Would you like it back?" Kasumi offered.

Very polite of her, as always.

Yep.

Kachiko accepted another Harvey Wallbanger from the bartender, {drinking

: sipping} it

in order to help her consider the matter. "My advice is, if you think
they're hot, knee them in the groin. And if they're ugly, let 'em keep

going

as far as you want."

"Thanks. You're always full of wonderful advice." Kasumi headed back

toward

the men.

Definitely full....  Though this advice actually seems to work fairly well
to keep Kasumi out of trouble.  Hard on the beaux though.

True.

Kachiko slammed her glass down on the counter. "That !#$%! I can't

believe

he's hanging all over her, and on television!" She'd show that rotten

jerk!

She'd track down some hunky guy and do something with him. She wasn't

sure

what, since there was no way she'd let a guy get farther than second

base on

a first date, but she'd think of something that was sure to make Ranma a
fountain of jealousy. Maybe introduce the hunk as the father of her

child or

something.

A bit tricky if she's not letting him past second base.

Yes, well, she's pretty 'drunken' as well. :)

She shook her head clear of the cobwebs for a moment. "Bonding. I mean
bonding. Not bondage. I'm not into that. I'd never do something like

that.

Except that one time with... but that's not important right now. But

there's

nothing wrong with experimenting. It's healthy. It shows you have an

open

mind." She noticed everyone's reaction again. "I think I'd better quit

while

I'm behind."

Remarkable wisdom considering how much she's probably drunk.

Sometimes clarity cuts through the haze.

While Kachiko tried figuring out where she had gone wrong, Kasumi had

moved

around her and Akane and walked up to Soun. She smiled and embraced him.
"Good evening, Father."

This might have been an interesting time for her to use her knee.  Or

possibly

after kissing Ranma.

I wasn't being that cruel to him.

Uncertain of how to react, Akane just accepted the display of affection.

As

Kasumi moved away, Akane noticed her own clothing had taken on a

somewhat

alcoholic scent. She {didn't' want to : didn't} know how much one had to

drink to cause

that, only that Kachiko was to blame for it.

It took the combined efforts of Kachiko and Akane to pry Kasumi away

from

him.

Nice to see them working together for a change.

Heh. Yeah.

There it was again! What was with these unusual thoughts regarding the

young

man who had been living under her roof all this time. Well, she knew

what to

do concerning such impure impulses. It was time for a very cold shower
followed by a very cold bath. That would dispose of her unwanted ardor
quickly enough, and she could return to normal.

Where's mother daughter bondage when you need it?

Heh.

"Cold water. I need cold water," Kasumi murmured to herself. Her impure

"A mole?" Kachiko asked.

I think zit sounded more like something Kachi would say then.

Hmm. Okay

left her breathless and made more muscles ache, but in a good way. Even

the

drinking had produced a fairly pleasing effect, allowing her to cast

aside

her usual inhibitions and enjoy herself to the fullest without regard as

to

what others would think of her (though judging by the painful aftermath,

she

could live with a little less pleasure if it meant a little less pain).

Crossover with Sextacular?

No. That's pretty much standalone and not due to be crossed over with jack.

Thanks for all the comments. They are greatly appreciated.

DB Sommer

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