--- JLee100441@aol.com wrote:

    "Guys, we got a problem. Both Megumi and that boy are under an 
enchantment. It's called the red string of fate and...What!?" Urd
yelled the last part 
out as she noticed the leveled stares Keiichi and Skuld were giving
her.  
    "Urd did you place a spell on my sister?" asked Keiichi in a
serious tone.
    "Hey, I had nothing to do with this."
    "Sure, we've heard that one before," said Skuld.
    "If you don't believe me you can ask Father." Urd retorted
back. Then 
Belldandy finally spoke. 

So typical, everyone automatically suspects Urd. 

And sometimes she's innocent! ^_^

    "Yes, ki is a persons life-force. Everyone on this beach is
emitting ki." 
Ranma turned back to Belldandy. "Everyone that is, except you."
    "You're emitting something, but it isn't ki. I'd almost say it
was magic, 
and a lot of it."

That's odd. Why would Belldandy be emitting anything different from
her sisters? Is this an important plot point?

    Megumi turned looked at Keiichi, who just nodded. She then
slapped him. 
"You jerk! Do you any idea how I felt during that? I thought I was
starting to lose my mind."
    "I-I just couldn't just tell anyone," said Keiichi holding his
burning cheek. 
    "But I'm your sister damn it!" Megumi yelled. She stopped when
Ranma 
placed his hand on her shoulder. He didn't like the fact that
Keiichi had lied to 
his sister, but he could understand somewhat.

Hmm. Has the love potion turned Megumi into a hot-head? And Ranma
into the cool and collected peace maker? I would have expected normal
Megumi to be surprised, but considering how she accepted Keiichi
living with a foreigner, I wouldn't expect her reaction to be severe.
Besides, Megumi isn't the violent type at all. Competitive, but not
violent.

Could just chalk it up to the potion, though.

-----

These are all minor quibbles, though. The story flows pretty well,
which is understandable since Megumi and Ranma really do make a good
pair. I'm looking forward to reading more of it.

It'll be interesting to see how Ranma reacts to the earth spirit who
guards Megumi's apartment. ^_^

Brian Welch

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