Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Wed, 10 Dec 2003 14:31:44 -0500 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

Shampoo was amused by her antics, as well as the fact she had drawn the
attention of more than a handful of the males around them.  She was
{consideri ng : considering} trying to match her friend's posing,
wondering just how much attention they could draw together, when she
felt a burning gaze behind her.

The Amazon turned to see it was the sullen and brooding Ryu who she had
sensed.  As usual, he was left to himself, alone and out of the way of
the other fighters who continued treating him as an pariah.  Shampoo
was finding herself increasingly wary of the youth.  There was far too
much lust for her in those eyes than she was comfortable with.  Even
Tarou, as lecherous as he was, didn't leer at her that way.  The open
lust reminded her of the men who had tried to rape her back when she
was in the dog pits.  Jaddo had helped her move past the worst of it,
but it was {always :} an event that would remain forever etched in her
mind.  Anything even loosely related to it always made her angry.
Always.

"She die in first dogfight.  Boom.  Just like that.  Best score in
twenty years no mean anything.  Simulators is not the same as real
life.  Park can make all the plans she want, and pat herself on the
back because she think she so smart.  The {Muskiesz : Muskies} not
able to resist for so long by accident, and neither has Mina.  Reality
no always confirm to plans, not even for Shampoo."

Interesting that her example would be from Ensign Shan's history.

As Shampoo exited the restroom, Park looked at her in bewilderment.
"What the hell was that supposed to mean?"

Which naturally puzzles anyone with no cross-dimensional experience.
Kodachi should spot it immediately.  Ranma and Nabiki might too.

That was all.  The Director was truly relieved.  Just because his
masters hadn't made any problematic demands did not mean they wouldn't
at some point.  "You shall have mine, if that's suitable.  I wasn't
planning on using it anyway."  That was the truth.  He rarely used the
box seat, which, given his importance, was one of the best in the
Battledome, near where the Emperor himself sat when he visited.  He
preferred watching the matches on television, so he saw with his own
eyes the exact same thing that the people giving him his ratings were
watching.  The best way to evaluate one's product was to use it.
Anything that appeared {dissatisfactory : unsatisfactory} would be
improved as he saw fit.

The owner left the {actually : actual} operation of the mansion in the
hands of the Tigress, who ran it with near inhuman efficiency.  That
was another reason for her high rank in the organization.  No one was
as skilled in debauchery as herself.  None possessed her talented hand
in training those who actually serviced the needs of the elite, as well
as keeping the less carnal parts of the operation working.  She still
traveled abroad frequently to oversee other operations, primarily in
the skin trade, which also flourished under her care.  But when she was
in Japan, this served as her residence and base of operations.

"It'll take some time before Mikado's old enough to be of actual use to
us anyway.  Years before this plan sees fruition, assuming Mikado
survives the gauntlet he's currently throwing himself into.  But we can
afford to be patient."

So who's fourth in line for control of the family?

"Of course.  But if she survives the fire she's been thrust into,
she'll be even stronger for it."  That was the way of the world.  Those
it didn't break, it made stronger.  Shishio was a living testament to
that.

That probably lays to rest one way I was hoping for Mina Li to get layed
low.  If she destroyed a property more valuable than herself, the other
property's owner might take action.  It would have been interesting if
she'd hurt one of Shadowlaw's.

Shishio gazed at the building before them{: .} Finally, it was time to
watch the fights.

Xxxxxxxxxxxx

The Director watched on the large television screen in his private room
as the fights progressed throughout the night.  Everything had happened
exactly as he thought it would.  There had been no upsets tonight.  He
had even successfully predicted the few even money fights on the card.
The only mild surprise was Mina going easy on her opponent.  He was an
attractive man who hadn't shot his mouth off, obviously taking her
seriously.  She rarely beat those ones up too badly.  She had a
fondness for handsome men that showed her respect.  It was the
attractive female fighters, outside of her own clique, that tended to
end up dead or crippled.  Losing attractive women, especially ones that
could fight, hurt ratings, so the Director tended to make most of
Mina's opponents either men, weak women that weren't going to last long
anyway, or ugly ones that at least had the potential of making a fight
of it.  She was definitely a problem child in some ways, but there
wasn't much he could do.  He couldn't {order : tell} a warrior how to
fight once they started a match.  It was tradition, and the closest
thing to a code that the fighters possessed.  Interference in a proper
duel was never tolerated.  Once on the Arena floor, it was an issue of
honor and blood, no matter the outcome.

"He is in rare form tonight," Running Deer said.  "If it wasn't for the
fact I know he's a complete asshole, I'd almost find him amusing.  I'd
like to know what it is that's made him so happy and Mina so pissed.
Maybe he's been doing her in the ass."

Even if she doesn't know who, Running Deer ought to know Tarou well
enough to know what.

The helpless Park was lifted up by her head.  Mina brought her face to
her own and kissed her briefly on the lips.  Blood was smeared over the
taller girl's chin as she shot Park a {pitiful : pitying} look.

"What you mean to say is, the Director is pissed off that I whacked one
of his cash cows," Mina clarified, then took a step inward.  She would
show no fear to these little toys, even if they were dangerous.

Of course he's pissed off.  I still wonder who owned Park's contract.

--
Mac :})
Give a hobbit a fish and he eats fish for a day.
Give a hobbit a ring and he eats fish for an age.


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