I realize you've been receiving some tough commentary, 
so I'm accepting your more barbed comments as a 
reaction to the flames and not replying in kind. 

--- Shade <rowan_phoenix@yahoo.com> wrote:

This is something Keitaro would do, not Naru. Naru
either breaks
contact immediately or punches. Often both, but
never does she pull a
Keitaro, prolonging inappropriate physical contact
"by mistake."
Keitaro isn't in this fic. Why does Naru have to
take on the H
aspects of his character?

....

Go back and read the LH manga again before saying
things that make no sense.

I have read the manga. That's my problem, you see.

In the manga, Naru grabs Keitaro's member but lets go 
and chases him from the bath. I now see how this scene 
could be an X-rated version of the corresponding anime 
scene, but manga? 

As has been mentioned, wasn't Motoko out training?
Kitsune would have
no reason to think so unless Motoko had announced
it.

Let's see, Motoko's interests  at the start of Love
Hina can be summarized by...Martial Arts, Martial
Arts...and more Martial Arts. 

And she always announces when she's going on a training 
trip. 

Motoko doesn't use air pressure attacks. In the
manga she
specifically says she uses her ki, and I can't
recall any mention of
air pressure. Unless there's a reference I'm
missing, of course. ^_^

What do you think a Ki attack is?

Its energized air.

Maybe in the Ranma universe, but this fic is in the Love
Hina universe. Ki in Love Hina is mental energy directly 
applied to the target. It isn't mental energy used to 
energize air and send it at the target. Case in point:

Motoko's signature attack after about Volume 9 or so is the
Zan Maken Ninotachi. Motoko specifically mentions directing
her ki at the target in this attack. This attack can rip a
demon out of a possessed individual without harming them. 
Motoko uses it in Volume 9 to seal a demon inside a sword,
letting the attack pass through Keitaro on its way to the
sword. Ki in Love Hina isn't energized air.

Yeah, even at the beginning of the manga, Motoko's
attacks are orders
of magnitude more powerful than Kuno ever gets.
Would Ranma mistake a
ki wave for a pressure wave? Assuming that Motoko's
sword attacks
have transit time, of course (not saying this is a
problem, since it
isn't clear). 

Similar techniques, orders of magnitude differences in
the skill and power.

Similar in appearance and source, but completely different 
mechanisms.

This fic has a lot going for it, but I'm having
trouble getting
around all the gratuitous H-ness. Even by Love Hina
standards, this
is way over the top. Then there's the OOC-ness of
Naru. Why is she
channeling Keitaro and some swooning dime store
novel
maiden-in-peril? 

Consult vol. 10 of the manga and get back to me.

Volume 10 occurs years after the events in this fic. 

Brian Welch

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