----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Shade" <rowan_phoenix@yahoo.com>
To: "FFML" <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Friday, November 28, 2003 11:57 PM
Subject: [FFML] [Fic][Ranma/Love Hina] Chasing Dreams Chaps 1-2

Boy, am I being a space cadet today. I know I responded to someone, but I
think I sent it directly to them and not to the list. It wasn't meant as a
private response, so I'm going to go over some of my points publicly.

1) The set up to have Ranma leave is, IMO, pretty weak and has problems.
Ranma feels such feelings over a woman he doesn't even know. Maybe it's what
he wants, but he doesn't really connect. I could almost believe it if he had
some childhood memory *of* his Grandma, but this was unconvincing.

2) The travelling money. Sigh. Lots of problems here. Since when do the
Genma and the Tendo's actually open Ranma's mail? Ranma's gotten several
letters and none were ever opened this way. The "missed" letter that only
Ranma spotted. If a lawyer wrote it (which is a given, IMO) it's going to be
very noticable. It's doubtful that cash would be sent, it would probably be
a check or money order. And the return address would have been from a law
firm. *ANY* of these things would have been a clue-truck to Nabiki or Akane
that this was money from a will and only for Ranma. It would have been
reprehensible that anyone would just take the money. Genma might try it, if
no one else had seen it. But around the kitchen table?

3) Akane non-reaction to Ranma was fairly thouroughly covered. It wasn't
Akane, it was a cliche-Akane for author's who don't like her. It wasn't even
that nasty of one, but it was the Akane that (even if just to herself,
kinda) cares for Ranma.

4) Ranma doing almost the exact same thing as the LH main guy (which I'm
spacing the name right now.) Ranma would react totally differently, I think.
But I don't know LH that well, so I'm going to leave it at that.

5) As a side note, the thing about LH having bigger ki-attacks than Ranma?
Not likely, even though I haven't seen that much of Love Hina. But I think
I'd have remembered hearing something if they rocked mountains or fought
someone like Saffron or Herb.

But Love Hina isn't about wacky martial arts, it's got a different theme.

Arthur Hansen


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