She was stunned speechless, good, that would give him time to leave.
Nabiki snagged his sleeve, a fake smile plastered across her face as 
she
whispered, "I can't believe you're doing this, Ranma! Damn you."

Even though the scene is written from Ranma's POV, I guess, I still
don't like being told she's stunned speechless and then she talks
in the same paragraph.  It's not effective.  

  At least no one asked why Sohin did not have a sword. It was widely
believed that for a samurai to part with his sword is to loose his
honor. But these men were in Saotome territory, and in the whole of

"lose"

  Without their two main teachers -- namely, Ranma and Nabiki -- Hanae
and Sei were left to their own devices, something rare with the barrage
of lessons they were imposed to learn daily. That was going to change

supposed

now that Cologne was given a free reign on the lessons.

rein with the lessons.  

hakama they trained in for the day. "Have you master'd that last move
father taught us?"

mastered

It seems this fanfic has taken on a life of its own.  Good to see.



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