Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Thu, 20 Nov 2003 22:24:02 -0500 LSMcGill <lsmcgill@hotmail.com> wrote:

Previous Chapters to Book 3 are, alas, not yet up on Florestica.  Poor
Larry has been severely overworked and is catching up as best he can.
A hearty thanks to him for all his hard work on behalf of we authors
who call his site home, and {assusrances : assurances} that I'm sure
he'll be caught up soon.

Ukyo looked at it a long time, seeming to be about to say something
several times.  Finally, she shrugged.  "When can you start?"
{It : She} sounded almost resigned.

Ukyo found her gaze caught by the tattoo's eyes... the same gold eyes
she had stared at in Zhu Shu's face, and she swallowed.  Her eyes
traced down the spiraling dragon until it came to the swords, and her
heart nearly stopped as she saw her spatula entangled within the
{ribbons : ribbons'} embrace.

"You look like a cat who's eaten a canary." she commented.  "Looking
forward to taking Rei off for another 'talk'."

I think I'd prefer that as a canary who's eaten a cat.

"Not an angel" she whispered softly.  "I {am. : am} a ghost."

"Hey Ran-chan!  Watch where you're {going1 : going.}"

Zhu Shu smiled as she stepped forward.  "Very glad see training not go
waste.  Perform move quite well.  Almost perfect.  Knew grace Usagi
display when waste time posturing have to show up
{sometime" : sometime."}

Zhu Shu poked her nose in the dressing room door, her emerald eyes
shining.  "Sister should not complain.  Even Zhu Shu find outfit
tempting.  Hentai will drool to death."

Considering her leanings, it's not surprising that Zhu Shu finds the
outfit tempting.

It had been a forgone conclusion, once Kodachi had announced her
intention of trying out for the Rhythmic Gymnastics squad, that she'd
be the only entrant.  If it weren't for the challenge {to : by} Shan
Pu, there wouldn't even have been a contest.  As it was, Kodachi was
pacing back and forth across the ring, waiting for Shan Pu.

There was far more applause this time.  Shan Pu didn't seem to notice,
but Ranma looked around, surprised.  More than just the Hentai
{squad : Squad} was clapping.  Many of the girls on the gymnastics
team seemed to be rooting for the Amazon to beat the tar out of
Kuno's sister.

Shan Pu just barely managed to grab the rope to keep from flying out of
the ring as she was once more {impacted : hit} in the chest by a
massive force.  Ranma watched as she forced herself to ignore the pain
and used the rope to bounce back in Kodachi's direction, catching the
laughing girl in the small of the back as she was just starting to
turn.  The gymnast flew across the ring to {impact : slam} face first
{with : into} the turnbuckle.

Kodachi shakily got to her feet and wiped the blood from her mouth.
"You will pay for {that demon : that, Demon}!  You and that other
Chinese girl!  You have tried to take my goddess away!  Make her love
you instead of ME, her devoted SLAVE!"

Overwhelmed by the memories and the fear, Ranma stared as Shan Pu
melted down into the pink and purple kitten, panic chittering in her
brain as her instinct to protect the helpless and her fear of cats
warred within her mind{: .}

Kodachi blurred, and everyone held their breath as they expected Ranma
to stagger from the girl's attack, but instead, Kodachi let out a yelp
as she reappeared in mid-air, outside the ring and flailing wildly as
she spun out of control into the crowd, crashing amid a group of hentai
who let out a cheer as {they : she} descended.

--
Mac :})
Give a hobbit a fish and he eats fish for a day.
Give a hobbit a ring and he eats fish for an age.


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