Thermopyle wrote:
Hey, I liked the scene with Usagi transforming. Anyway, I'll read
just about anything, no matter how bad it is, and there are certainly
a lot of fics worse than this one. This one does, however, have a
number of problems, and so I commented on some of them. Yes, the
comments weren't phrased as nicely as they could have been, but for
the most part they were constructive and aimed towards showing the
following:
The gratuitous Japanese should be cut. The ANCs are quite annoying.
Much of the chapter was filler built up around those ANCs as well as
Ranma's bogus female problems. The chapter was packed with cliche
nonsense that added nothing to the story and was used simply because
it was conventional. The conflict is all external with nothing
internal to give the story a focus, so the characters just thrash
around in meaningless orgies of author bias.
The story is just poorly written.
In that case, if you liked the story despite your problems with it,
you should have said so. ;)
While critiquing (sp?) an author for things that you feel could be
improved is good, let us not also forget the value of positive
feedback. Hilight what they did right, and what you'd like to see more
of. (As you just did above.)