--- Shade <rowan_phoenix@yahoo.com> wrote:

Love Hina Note: AU, uses mix of anime & manga, spoilers later 
on for those who haven't read through the manga and haven't 
seen the entire tv series, ovas, and specials. 

Hmm, I suppose it depends upon what you've left out of the 
manga, or are you just adding in a few things from the anime?
 

"Let's make a promise to meet in Todai."

He wanted to go too!

He started running toward them as fast as he could, trying to catch
up 
to them before they vanished like they always did. 

"Wait for me! Wait! Don't leave me behind!"

Interesting scene. Is this present-day Ranma chasing his simpler 
childhood self, or something else?

With a yawn and a groan, he threw off the warmth of the blanket 
and sat up on the beaten up old futon.

It might beat sleeping on the ground but not by much.

The Tendos didn't have the slightest clue of how good they had it
here.

There had been times on the training trip when Ranma would have
happily
kicked somebody else's ass to be able to sleep on a real mattress.

You might want to change the "It might beat sleeping on the ground 
but not by much" to "It beat sleeping on the ground." I was left 
wondering why the Tendos had it so good, since there wasn't that 
much of a difference. Unless you want to contrast what the Tendos 
are sleeping on to what Ranma is sleeping on.

We regret to inform you that your grandmother, Mrs. Keiko Hina,
recently passed away. As per the instructions in her will, you have
been designated as her primary heir. This includes controlling
interest 
in the property known as the Hinata Sou as well as the surrounding
lands 
within the Hinata district. Her bank accounts will be held in trust
for you 
by Ms. Haruka Urashima until you reach 20 years of age or marry,
whichever 
comes first. A portion of those funds have been released and
enclosed with 
this letter in order to pay for your traveling expenses....'

Typical Grandma Hina sort of thing to do, actually. 

'Your grandmother...passed away.'

'Passed away.'

Genma had never told him.

Still, "passing away" seems OOC for Grandma Hina. Isn't she 
supposed to be indestructible? However, I can see her sending just
such a note to Ranma for no other reason than to get a desired 
reaction out of him. Of course, she would just explain it as a 
miscommunication while she was out climbing Everest or something. 
There's certainly precedent in the manga for her doing that sort of
thing.

(To be continued)

I'm looking forward to seeing how this plays out!

Brian Welch

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