Shade wrote:
Domo Brian,
As I recall, those events happen in the opposite
order. My mind is
a bit wobbly at the moment, thanks to the
aformentioned six days of
fasting, however. So, some minor time-line
tweaking, as I understand it?
Nah, the Shi Shi Hokodan arc takes place in vol. 20,
Nodoka shows up in vol 22.
Dang. You're right. >_<
Hmm. I may have screwed up one of my own timelines....
Outfits? Or is that, too, vague?
Given Ranma's notoriously poor memory for faces, it
seemed likely to me he wouldn't be much better with
clothes either.
And of course, no sense in spoiling everything right
away now. ^^
Fair enough. ;)
As is this. Quite a shift from your normal
tone, but I think you're
carrying it _very_ well.
Thank you. I haven't done this kind of thing since
that Tenchi private bet a long time ago, I was
worried I might be a bit rusty.
You've still got it. :)
wasted for nothing -- wasted (if they're wasted,
they're wasted,
right? :)
Heh, well they could have been wasted for something.
^^
Then it wouldn't be wasted. :)
I fear my usefullness may have come to an end.
_<
I had a good teacher. ^_^
And now the student has surpassed the teacher... wait! I got one
more trick left!
Hard to tell which? Either means she's looking
at him like she
covets him. Maybe... looking at him and deciding how
much he's worth by
the kilo, or something?
Ah, my fault. Meant to convey that basic covet idea,
but also that there isn't much difference between her
greed for fine food and cash. Sorta like Genma, come
to think of it...
Ah, that makes sense.
Aw, crap. I get it now. Would they really just
steal his money like that?
Yep. In a heart beat.
Dang....
Actually I did note earlier that the letter itself had
been overlooked by everyone in favor of the thick wad
of yen.
<but then he noticed a small letter that had somehow
been overlooked by the others and was still lying
hidden inside.
He pulled it out slowly, it seemed to have escaped the
notice of everyone else who had gone through his mail
and he was determined to protect this small remmant of
his personal privacy. >
In essence they simply peeked in his mail, saw the
money, and ignored everything else once they grabbed
it. They've already got their own justifications for
taking the money, from Genma's "Its for the boy's
good, I can be trusted to spend it in his interests"
to Soun's "I deserve it for letting him live here" to
Nabiki's "I want it, and I'll cheat whoever I have to
in order to get it."
Its not that they know about the marriage clause,
they're just being their typical short-sighted selves.
They now have enough money to hold a wedding, thus...
Ah, okay. THAT makes more sense.
Overall, I really like this. It feels more like a
prologue than a first chapter, but I liked it anyway,
and I get the sensation that the mood may lighten as
the story continues.
Heh. ^^
Yes, it gets a bit lighter in the next part, but I'm
trying to keep a more serious tone overall in this
one.
Thanks again.
Any time!
-Shade